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Denise
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0 posted 1999-09-01 09:06 PM


I gaze out on the misty sea
And wonder if I'll ever be
Set free from all this pain I feel
These waves of sadness, chains of steel.

I feel the gray clouds in the sky
Press down upon my heart, I cry,
"Oh, why can't I just see the sun?
My strength is gone...my soul's undone."

I took my grievance to the Lord
My heart, my soul, in one accord,
"When shall this end...this agony?
My world's in such disharmony."

He gently took me by the hand
And set my feet on higher land
He touched my eyes so I could see
His purpose through eternity...

"Although this world will break your heart
My loving grace I will impart
So you can see beyond the deed
To look inside, to see the need."

"And ev'rything in life, you see,
That touches you - must pass through Me
And though you struggle with such pain
I'll work it all for your own gain!"

I gaze out on the misty sea
His waves of kindness cover me
He set my feet on higher land;
He rescued me from sinking sand!



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Denise

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WhtDove
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1 posted 1999-09-01 09:14 PM


This was Beautiful! I am sure He smiled down at this!
Denise
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2 posted 1999-09-01 09:22 PM


Thank you WhtDove! It's great to be back online. Wow, what happened last night? I just thought it was my system again. I was quite surprised to find out that it wasn't.

I also want to thank you and everybody else for all the kind comments on my previous postings. I tried to last night, but...!

thanks again!

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Denise

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3 posted 1999-09-01 09:27 PM


You are certainly blessed with talent....no doubt about that.
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 1999-09-01 09:33 PM


Denise...this is absolutely one of the most beautiful postings I have seen. This entire thing works so well together....everything, from the theme to the form, the rythym to the rhyme......all of it works well together to creat a masterful piece. Very well done!!!

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

Tim
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5 posted 1999-09-01 09:35 PM


I enjoyed your words... exceptional poem..
Denise
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6 posted 1999-09-01 10:31 PM


Balladeer, hoot_owl_rn and Tim, thank you for your kind words!
Lost Dreamer
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7 posted 1999-09-02 06:03 PM


This was inspiring to read. Thanks for sharing.

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Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.

Denise
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8 posted 1999-09-02 07:18 PM


Thank you Lost Dreamer! I'm glad that you found it inspiring.
Starith
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9 posted 1999-09-07 04:29 PM


Another beautiful piece of poetry pushed to the back so that none will see.

Back to the top so that all might have another look at it.

Beautiful!

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Pepper
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10 posted 1999-09-07 05:17 PM


exceptional.......

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

caroline
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11 posted 1999-09-07 05:41 PM


Denise, this is a real masterpiece...should be a publisher's delight as well.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Denise
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12 posted 1999-09-07 08:58 PM


Thank you Starith, Pepper and caroline for reading and commenting. Unfortunately, none of the publishers that I've sent any of my work to were interested. But, as I understand it, that's not an uncommon problem with poets! Thanks again for all the kind comments.

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Denise

Billy
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13 posted 1999-09-10 02:27 AM


Wow! This one is great.
Sue
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14 posted 1999-09-10 03:11 AM


Beautiful!
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15 posted 1999-09-10 07:05 AM


Waves of sadness... how many times have they washed over me? *S* This is lovely and very well done!!
Denise
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16 posted 1999-09-10 08:39 AM


Thank you Suthern, I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading and commenting!

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Denise

Julie
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17 posted 1999-09-10 06:46 PM


You write so beautifully. I loved the part
where you said all things in this life must
pass through Him. This one needs to stay on top. THANK YOU! THANK YOU! (How come I missed this earlier?)duh!!

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Julie
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Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure.
Marianne Williamson

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18 posted 1999-09-10 07:25 PM



I liked the way it ended with a touch of grace & optimism..well done..

Denise
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19 posted 1999-09-10 07:27 PM


Thank you all, Billy, Sue and Julie. And Julie, knowing that all things in this life (the good and the bad) must first pass through Him has helped me get through some tough times. Thanks again, everyone for reading and commenting and enjoying!

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Denise

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