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In your dreams

0 posted 06-28-2011 10:23 PM       View Profile for Juju   Email Juju   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Juju's Home Page   View IP for Juju


The wind beats against my apartment like a swarm of bees. I must have been after the honey hidden in the subtle caresses of the summer breeze this morning. Sometimes when you want to feel so bad, any sense received develops into collages colors, tastes, and smells.  

When I was a little girl I was always told how pathetic I was. Somehow even when I am 25 years old, I am still a child looking up.

Even now as the passing train divides the sunset into periodic flashes of yielding, orange, light: I wonder if I should go or stay.

Still I worry if I can find a man who will love me for who I am, and that I can love him back.  



-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

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1 posted 07-02-2011 07:02 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Fine writing...James
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2 posted 10-26-2011 10:43 AM       View Profile for Anoo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Anoo

I enjoyed reading the emotions trapped in your lines.
Great writing.
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3 posted 12-31-2011 01:38 AM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

It comes, my friend, it comes - in between looking and looking , it comes.

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Between the Lines

4 posted 12-31-2011 02:48 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

I think every young woman feels this way at one time or another..but pathetic?? you? Never! and your picture shows your depth.

Hope you have a wonderful new year.

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In The Mirror

5 posted 01-06-2017 03:49 PM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

The philosophy in your writing is tickling.

Have you ever known anyone who, while always expecting so much actually received so little in near-equal proportions?

Those who expect less and give more see their happy meter always rise high. If they do nothing but 'talk the talk', nothing will talk to them in return. By this time, you may have found a truth that wasn't "pathetic" and found it wasn't really hiding at all.      

...just bein' Bluesy

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6 posted 02-01-2017 02:57 PM       View Profile for HM3   Email HM3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HM3


The title is almost code for I'm ok.

Work like money doesn't matter, love like you've never been hurt, dance like nobody's watching...

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7 posted 06-14-2017 10:46 AM       View Profile for miscellanea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miscellanea


   How few words can forward such imagery is amazing! You had me hook, line, and sinker by the paragraph. Very strong, but elegant writing, Miss Juju. I have already spun back three times to re-read some of your lines and how they all fit together. As if in a stalled car, I sat in front of that train waiting for the next flicker of light to pass. Yes, and I remember waiting for that special someone, too. From your creativity,I'd say someone will be a lucky someone when the lights turn on! Way-to-go on being INsecure, as colors swirl in your mind!
     Excellent writing!


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