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Watching the cursor blink, waiting for words to rise from the bowl of emptiness. Breath in, breath out, slowly, slowly. Let go of forced constructions, distractions and other thoughtful things. Wait, wait for the mind to still and cross to the borderland where watercolor images wash away time, place and distance -- cherry blossoms


The gods put on their mercy coats that day and pulled from their pockets cherry blossoms that stilled the furious voices as petals drifted slowly over tortured shoulders. From sleeves of kindness they drew kites of chittering sparrows and flew them on softest sighs that changed the wind chime sound of the fountain into the ringing of her wedding bells. Lost for so long in a labyrinth where fearful shadows grow as tiny deaths in the wake of the watchman’s footsteps, the May light on sweet distant memories forced open the iron gate. She caught petals in the palm of her hand, held them out as a child holds a snowflake on a woolen mitten, smiled and said with a voice that hadn’t spoken for days, “The color of my wedding dress”.


Save file, close program, rinse out coffee mug, close the breakroom door -- remember and forget.

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It's good to read you again.

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Thanks so much for reading and your kind comments, Alison.
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I'm starting to see a pattern in these little vignettes you've been posting .  I'm glad to see that you've taken prose and made it work almost like haiku, with its snappy descriptions and succinct presentations.  

I loved this:

Wait, wait for the mind to still and cross to the borderland where watercolor images wash away time, place and distance

This is an amazing way of presenting art.  You start up with a zen-like clearing of the mind and then you arrive at a message that tells the reader implicitly, "I'm going to paint you picture."

Your little vignette drew me in in a way that few pieces here do.  Your transition back from this marriage ceremony and onto the computer again was masterfully executed.

As you can probably tell, I'm adding this to my library.

 
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