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Passions in Prose

Love, Really

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

0 posted 2010-02-02 02:18 PM

I can tell no great love story.

I was never an underdog risen up to save humanity.

I'm just a girl who has zero to no idea what she's doing.

I'm afraid to tell any story for fear of judgment and condemnation from those who are holier-than-thou.

I cannot imagine that anyone could actually truly care about what I think, what I notice, what I feel.

Perhaps...it's a risk worth taking.

Perhaps...someday...someone will give a sh!t.

Or, even better

(for me, worse for them),

they will be able to relate.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2010-02-09 06:43 PM

Keep going...those that are accepting will accept your story and those that are critical will criticize...this is life...James

ladylisa
Member

since 2007-04-29

Posts 342
Florida USA

2 posted 2010-03-05 01:50 AM

You are in a place where you can write all your stories, and they will be understood. Keep going.....lisa

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

3 posted 2010-04-04 01:38 PM

This piece is a bit like a poem. I appreciated the frankness of your speaker. It would work well as a kind of introductory poem / set of statements for a collection of other parts of your work.

To offer a critique, I wouldn't have minded seeing these lines more fleshed out like short paragraphs perhaps.

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