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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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0 posted 2006-05-07 05:51 PM


Skeptics looked at me as though I was crazy. Hell, maybe I was, but craziness is called for sometimes. There was once a time I prided myself on being crazy...but I digress (you'll have to excuse me, I do that).

In any case, I knew I was being mocked, scoffed at, that I was found laughable, but that was to those who didn't understand what it was like. This was something I had to do. The sky had barely been broken by the sun, but, warm as it was, I had gathered a respectable crowd. Some of them catcalled; classy, you might call them. Others simply stood, whispering about the terrible bluntness of teenagers today.

I heard none of this.

Instead I stood my ground, not because I wanted to, but because I had to. Because everyone needed to see you for what you really were. Because everybody needed to know the truth, shocking as it was. So stood there, exposed, not just physically, but emotionally, outside your building. Stood there from dawn to dusk, letting thousands see the pain you relieved yourself of on my body. Stood there holding a sign that showed the last things you said to me before leaving this morning. Stood there and stared straight ahead, all day long, just so the world would know, so that the world might share my pain, and so that the world would, just maybe, end it.

That's why I stood here, bruises and all. So that no other little girl would go home frightened of the night. So that I would never have to go home frightened of nighttime again. Today, I didn't expose myself to the world...I exposed you.


_keryn

When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better.
Mae West

© Copyright 2006 Keryn - All Rights Reserved
Larry C
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1 posted 2006-05-07 07:01 PM


Keryn,
That is a very impactful write. I do pray all is well.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Clang
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since 2005-12-15
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2 posted 2006-05-07 09:09 PM



If this is about sexual child abuse, or physical abuse, then you have a right to take a stand.  

Good for you!

the_girl_next_door
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since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
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3 posted 2006-05-07 09:16 PM


Keryn.. I loved this piece by you.. it showed such emotion.. the end was really breath catching.. as for me? I'm not sure I fit in with the prose crowd quite well.. I'm gonna try to write something fresh though..

I loved it..

Keep up the good work and post more soon.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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4 posted 2006-05-07 09:57 PM


Larry, thanks so much for commenting and for your support. Everything is...right, for once, finally.

Clang, I think you got the message. Thank you so much for commenting!

Heather! Babe I <3 you. haaha, I didn't mean you had to join the Prose scene when I said free verse. I just meant to try straying from the rhyme schemes in actual poetry. I think you'd be a really strong free versed poet. ...did that make sense? Probably not. I'll explain later. Thanks for commenting me<3

<3ker

When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better.
Mae West

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
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5 posted 2006-05-07 10:02 PM


Desire nothing except desirelessness.
Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

Hey Heather, just had to comment on that...I disagree...

Desire everything, except desireless-ness
Hope for everything save rising above hopes
Want for everything, for if you don't, Nothing will come to you. (Desire, hope and want are how dreamers begin their dreams, and without dreamers...well, where would the world be?)


...my (exhausted) thoughts...

When I'm good, I'm very good. But when I'm bad I'm better.
Mae West

the_girl_next_door
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since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
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6 posted 2006-06-12 12:45 PM


Keryn.. I love how you revised my quote.. I found it on a site a while back and it just always stuck.. I kinda have a negative and positive outlook on everything. I try to be positve most of the time but I guess the quote just shows more of my negative side. I don't agree with living like mine says but when you're down and you're in one of those moods where you just want to cry and be alone and don't feel like smiling this 'quote' just seems to help you  (me in this case) but as far as inspiration and living life.. the way you said it is so much better. I mean they're just quotes but I live much of my life by quotes.. they help me somehow.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

nedj
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since 2006-06-23
Posts 87
Oregon USA
7 posted 2006-06-23 02:49 PM


I am astonished! By your openness, by your honesty, and by the eloquence with which you articulated such a powerful event in such a young life. You are going to be a master of turning tragedy into triumph if you aren't already. And you might consider being grateful for the gift of events that provide you with the reason and the power to do and say such things. Just in case you haven't yet noticed, they are not your enemies: they are friends traveling incognito. Thank you so much for going public.

A poem's just a poet in a word.

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