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TheGirlNoOneKnew Member
since 2003-12-04
Posts 92PA, USA |
She was such a pretty girl, with her eyes shut so tight. Poised, elegance radiating from her body like the slightest touch of summer sun. Her cheeks splashed rose red, muave lipstick pressed daintly to her lips. I wanted to hold her hand, to make her feel safe again. But all I could see was darkness. All I could hear were silent cries coming from inside my mind. And in the background, I heard someone murmer. "She had loved to live but somehow she had learned to die." |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
This is short, but really has a kick in the ending. It really makes one wonder how she got that way... Enjoyed the description and, especially, the last line. misc'e |
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TheGirlNoOneKnew Member
since 2003-12-04
Posts 92PA, USA |
Thanks for reading and responding.  I wrote this in the point of view of myself at a funeral, describing a dead girls body (as morbid as that sounds). Anyway, thanks again. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Hello again, TGNOK, Death and sadness. It happens... I've felt that way before, too. Don't worry about morbid. I think it's good to try to understand. Check my prose, My Hero on Memorial Day and you'll know one point from where I'm coming from. She was my best friend. It is listed just a few down from yours...Thanks. misc'e |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
I really enjoyed this. It was short, but very powerful. Thanks for the read. Jen "The course of true love never did run smooth." -William Shakespeare |
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