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There was a note on my bed when you left.

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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow


0 posted 05-13-2004 01:52 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Kaoru

"What's so amazing about me?"

"Well, you're intelligent beyond your years, and you write amazing poetry."

"That's hardly amazing."

"You're right, but it's amazing to me."

"I don't find you amazing."

"Why not?"

"You're just human."

"So are you."

"I know, far too well do I know. This is why I am hardly amazing. In retrospect, you and I are alike in everyway. So are you and that tree."

"Which tree?"

"Whichever one you feel closest to, I guess."

"What makes a tree alike to me? I don't have branches."

"Well, you have arms."

"You're a funny human."

This is love, isn't it? A conversation is nothing with names and faces. I thought to myself, I could not respond.

"What are you thinking?"

"I'm not thinking anything."

Blatent lie, but how would he know?

It was cold, we'd been outside, and the window had been opened by some unknown source.. or I'd just not closed it from months before. I saw lightning in the distance, but nothing close enough to cause fear. I knew somewhere it was flooding, and the flood was calling to me. I heard him breathing, thinking, waiting for me to say something..anything.
Then, he spoke,

"I wish you were amazed by me like you used to be.."

"You know there's no way for me to respond to that."

"You're amazed by the trees.."

"I'm enamoured, not amazed, now be quiet and close your eyes."

"Why?"

"You'll see."

"No, I won't.


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1 posted 05-13-2004 10:40 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


More, please.
Dark Angel
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2 posted 05-13-2004 05:10 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

yes please...more.

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

pictureme
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3 posted 05-13-2004 10:33 PM       View Profile for pictureme   Email pictureme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pictureme

Kaoru,
this kind of left me,
closing my eyes, waiting to see,
what was next?
I agree with the others more please
don't leave me alone in the dark. :-)
pictureme :-)
Kaoru
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4 posted 05-14-2004 04:02 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

Well, I was hoping for this..

I wanted to leave you wanting more, of course..but this is also my first attempt at writing conversational prose.. so we'll see.

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5 posted 05-18-2004 10:47 AM       View Profile for Endlessecho   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Endlessecho

Wonderful first step.  I'd never guess.  I was also captivated and was sad to leave the scene.  I want to see more!
mytuesdaywishes
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6 posted 05-18-2004 11:14 AM       View Profile for mytuesdaywishes   Email mytuesdaywishes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mytuesdaywishes

i keep forgetting to comment on your posts because im busy searching for others...you really are amazing, as amazing as that tree and a million other things that make this world so unbearably beautiful

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

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7 posted 05-19-2004 11:52 AM       View Profile for Decaflame   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Decaflame


So, then, more, please?
Martie
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8 posted 05-19-2004 11:52 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I like the mystery and deep spiritual feeling to this.  
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9 posted 06-07-2009 07:26 PM       View Profile for kindredspirit   Email kindredspirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kindredspirit

i saw it, i felt it, i loved it.

amazing!
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10 posted 06-07-2009 09:48 PM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

I enjoyed this a lot.  I agree, more please.

Life's short.  Think hard!
Me!

MinSW
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11 posted 06-21-2009 02:56 AM       View Profile for MinSW   Email MinSW   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for MinSW

More pls!
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12 posted 06-25-2009 11:10 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

What's so amazing about you?

Well, I think your writing is one thing amazing about you.  I really enjoyed this and thought it flowed really well.  Plus, I have had these conversations and it's nice to read it from another's perspective.  I, too, would like to read more.

Alison
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13 posted 04-27-2010 04:30 AM       View Profile for VelvetVampress   Email VelvetVampress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for VelvetVampress

Small voice in a corner of the room..."More please"
Mysteria
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14 posted 04-27-2010 08:02 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Sitting also in the corner on a little stool waiting   How is Freya?
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15 posted 05-04-2010 08:57 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Enjoyed...James
Sunshine
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16 posted 05-04-2010 10:06 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

And now you know, my simple request
was...well, "write on!"

More, please.

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17 posted 05-22-2010 07:02 AM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Enjoyed reading you, my friend...always do.

j.
tracie66
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18 posted 11-16-2011 07:25 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

well done, this is interesting & intriguing & I enjoyed immensely.

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
                         W. E. Channing


 
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