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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2004-05-13 01:52 AM


"What's so amazing about me?"

"Well, you're intelligent beyond your years, and you write amazing poetry."

"That's hardly amazing."

"You're right, but it's amazing to me."

"I don't find you amazing."

"Why not?"

"You're just human."

"So are you."

"I know, far too well do I know. This is why I am hardly amazing. In retrospect, you and I are alike in everyway. So are you and that tree."

"Which tree?"

"Whichever one you feel closest to, I guess."

"What makes a tree alike to me? I don't have branches."

"Well, you have arms."

"You're a funny human."

This is love, isn't it? A conversation is nothing with names and faces. I thought to myself, I could not respond.

"What are you thinking?"

"I'm not thinking anything."

Blatent lie, but how would he know?

It was cold, we'd been outside, and the window had been opened by some unknown source.. or I'd just not closed it from months before. I saw lightning in the distance, but nothing close enough to cause fear. I knew somewhere it was flooding, and the flood was calling to me. I heard him breathing, thinking, waiting for me to say something..anything.
Then, he spoke,

"I wish you were amazed by me like you used to be.."

"You know there's no way for me to respond to that."

"You're amazed by the trees.."

"I'm enamoured, not amazed, now be quiet and close your eyes."

"Why?"

"You'll see."

"No, I won't.



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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-05-13 10:40 AM



More, please.

Dark Angel
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2 posted 2004-05-13 05:10 PM


yes please...more.

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

pictureme
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3 posted 2004-05-13 10:33 PM


Kaoru,
this kind of left me,
closing my eyes, waiting to see,
what was next?
I agree with the others more please
don't leave me alone in the dark. :-)
pictureme :-)

Kaoru
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4 posted 2004-05-14 04:02 AM


Well, I was hoping for this..

I wanted to leave you wanting more, of course..but this is also my first attempt at writing conversational prose.. so we'll see.


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5 posted 2004-05-18 10:47 AM


Wonderful first step.  I'd never guess.  I was also captivated and was sad to leave the scene.  I want to see more!
mytuesdaywishes
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6 posted 2004-05-18 11:14 AM


i keep forgetting to comment on your posts because im busy searching for others...you really are amazing, as amazing as that tree and a million other things that make this world so unbearably beautiful

joy has its own justice. and dreams are languid and lawless. and everything bows to beauty, when it's fierce and when it's flawless...

Decaflame
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7 posted 2004-05-19 11:52 AM



So, then, more, please?

Martie
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8 posted 2004-05-19 11:52 PM


I like the mystery and deep spiritual feeling to this.  
kindredspirit
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9 posted 2009-06-07 07:26 PM


i saw it, i felt it, i loved it.

amazing!

fractal007
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10 posted 2009-06-07 09:48 PM


I enjoyed this a lot.  I agree, more please.

Life's short.  Think hard!
Me!

MinSW
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11 posted 2009-06-21 02:56 AM


More pls!
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12 posted 2009-06-25 11:10 AM


What's so amazing about you?

Well, I think your writing is one thing amazing about you.  I really enjoyed this and thought it flowed really well.  Plus, I have had these conversations and it's nice to read it from another's perspective.  I, too, would like to read more.

Alison

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13 posted 2010-04-27 04:30 AM


Small voice in a corner of the room..."More please"
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14 posted 2010-04-27 08:02 PM


Sitting also in the corner on a little stool waiting   How is Freya?
JamesMichael
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15 posted 2010-05-04 08:57 PM


Enjoyed...James
Sunshine
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16 posted 2010-05-04 10:06 PM


And now you know, my simple request
was...well, "write on!"

More, please.


jwesley
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17 posted 2010-05-22 07:02 AM


Enjoyed reading you, my friend...always do.

j.

tracie66
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18 posted 2011-11-16 07:25 AM


well done, this is interesting & intriguing & I enjoyed immensely.

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It is the harmony of the universe
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