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Fariegirl
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0 posted 2004-04-02 04:03 PM



"Freak!" I hear from one of the more popular groups. "Tree hugger!" From another. I keep my head down, a song that I have in my head is the only thing keeping me from yelling back. "Hey, freak girl! Why do you even come to school, you ain't gonna learn nothin'!" I hear one of the jocks say. "Screw you." I think, but don't say it. This is my life, but I didn't choose it. I used to have more friends, but they all changed. One of the preps approaches me. "Hey, don't listen to them, they don't know you." I look up, hope filling my heart. She continues, "If they did, they wouldn't waste their breath on a case like yours." She laughs, then walks back to her click. I hate this school. "Weirdo!" I hear. Then I feel a fry hit me in the back of the head. I stand up. "Watch it!" I yell. “Watcha gonna do about it, freak?” The jock that threw it at me said. In my head, I stand up to the boy, but I just sit down. “That’s what I thought, don’t be messin with me.” He says. By now, I just can’t stand it, I get up. “What, you wanna start something?” He says, poking me in the shoulder. “What if I do.” I say quietly. “What was that?” He says louder then necessary. “I said,” I walk towards him, “What if I do.” He just laughs. “The tree hugger thinks that she can win!” Now the crowd begins to gather, they start chanting, “Fight, fight, fight,” over and over. He steps close to me, I take his arm and twist it behind his back. The crowd cheers for me, I’m winning. He screams at me to let him go, I wait a few more seconds then throw him into the jeering crowd. I am brought out of this dream by another taunt. “Wake up tree girl! Time for class!” I smile as the last of my dream fades away. This is my life, but I didn't choose it.



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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-04-02 10:19 PM


Hello my soul.

let's break this down...

quote:
"Freak!"

I hear from one of the more popular groups.

"Tree hugger!" From another. I keep my head down, a song that I have in my head is the only thing keeping me from yelling back.

"Hey, freak girl! Why do you even come to school, you ain't gonna learn nothin'!" I hear one of the jocks say.

"Screw you." I think, but don't say it. This is my life, but I didn't choose it. I used to have more friends, but they all changed. One of the preps approaches me.

"Hey, don't listen to them, they don't know you." I look up, hope filling my heart. She continues,

"If they did, they wouldn't waste their breath on a case like yours." She laughs, then walks back to her click. I hate this school.

"Weirdo!" I hear. Then I feel a fry hit me in the back of the head. I stand up.

"Watch it!" I yell.

“Watcha gonna do about it, freak?” The jock that threw it at me said. In my head, I stand up to the boy, but I just sit down.

“That’s what I thought, don’t be messin with me.” He says.

By now, I just can’t stand it, I get up.

“What, you wanna start something?” He says, poking me in the shoulder.

“What if I do.” I say quietly.

“What was that?” He says louder then necessary.

“I said,” I walk towards him, “What if I do.” He just laughs.

“The tree hugger thinks that she can win!” Now the crowd begins to gather, they start chanting,

“Fight, fight, fight,” over and over. He steps close to me, I take his arm and twist it behind his back. The crowd cheers for me, I’m winning. He screams at me to let him go, I wait a few more seconds then throw him into the jeering crowd. I am brought out of this dream by another taunt.

“Wake up tree girl! Time for class!” I smile as the last of my dream fades away. This is my life, but I didn't choose it.


~*~

You don't ask for a critique, but I will offer the above suggestion.  Break out the speech, set the play, and walk away, the winner!

I am very impressed. I would like to see more, please!

Match
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since 2002-07-01
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2 posted 2004-04-03 08:11 PM


I liked this

Im a child.

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