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Return To Sender (Prose Poem)(Pt. One)
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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It was morning when I saw the step of her upon the old wooden porch, standing there quietly, waiting, wanting to knock...unsure. We both, both of us, riveted to our own shadows. Afraid to let time come between faces once so youthful. Would she feel that... Seeing her through the curtains, slightly open...yet closed to unknowing eyes, blue eyes, kind eyes...sensual eyes...should I... I tried to step, yet the energy seemed frighteningly, pitifully inadequate. My foot glued firmly to the wooden floor, one suffering from far too few polishes and far too many steps. Oh, but to just be able to take that step forward, to shout out “Coming!”.... To open an old weathered door....It and I both having suffered much abuse from the daily warming rays of a setting sun....will she walk away, or... Turning slowly away from the door, hesitating, reaching inside her purse, removing a letter... Terrifying suspense after 20 years of living separate lives, places... Closing my eyes, imagining that moment when I last saw her, remembering the tenderness of her touch, the electrifying kiss, lingering for days. The sudden sound of a car door startling me....she pulled slowly away, glancing back...hoping... Sadness overwhelming me, shamed by my hesitance.. Looking down toward my feet....lying there before me, a white envelope, addressed to me... postmarked 20 years before...the blazing words of "return to sender, address unknown" standing out against the perfect penning of a delicate hand... [This message has been edited by Magnus (11-23-2003 09:58 PM).] |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
ok i'm hooked... really looking forward to pt.2 snow "...why does my skeleton pursue me |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I wait for part 2.....knowing what I will find....sigh.... Lauren~ I had a dream last night |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Barry, I also am waiting for Part 2.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ditto... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
I could really sink my thoughts into this one. Looking forward to... the rest of the story. Deb |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
You always capture the essence of each moment with your perfectly descriptive words. Great Job! Eric |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
More please!!!! hugs, Chris  "At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
anxious for part 2... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 clickinto library |
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PsychoticBunni Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 162Mythical Atlantis |
wow now i wish i read this part before i read part 2. lol. dyslexia is a fatal curse. but seriously, beautiful description. Meg Meg- And the Texan pushed the Mexican out of the plane and screamed, "Long live the ALAMO!!!!!!!!!" |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry...You captured the feeling and the perfect ending in this...much enjoyed, dear man! |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Well, Barry, here I am a little late. I am so glad I didn't miss this series. Great writing. Now, I am off to pick up Part II. Patricia |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh wow...off looking for part two! Hugs~ ~ To love and be loved |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well then - Isn't this an interesting prologue... and next comes???...  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ My feelings overwhelmed ... I go to the next one~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*` ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Okay... I'm hooked. *G* Onward to part 2! *S* |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wow, Barry!! This is brilliant and I can't wait to get the the next instalment. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Barry - excellent writing, going now to read part II... BC |
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pictureme Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 248Ohio, USA |
Gosh an awesome read...and now I must go to 2......................... pictureme :-) |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Oh, the Big Hollow....and you write it so well! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Don't keep us in suspense too long Barry!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
#1 down, six to go... |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
well done on this! |
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