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merlynh Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 411deer park, wa |
Here's one exsample of the short cute stuff I use to write a few years ago. I've been busy writing so much more complex plots, but can not help myself from going back and improving on what I did years ago. This piece was originally written in one paragraph, I believe breaking it up really helped to give it a clearer meaning. Tell me what you think? Corpse With A Sweet Tooth One night deep under ground a corpse was dinning on worms and maggots, when he found a piece of candy in a wrapper. "Mmmm!" What's thisss?" he hissed threw rotten lips while undoing the plastic paper with hands missing a finger or two, pushed three ants and a spider into the candy, put it in his mouth and started to chew. "Yum!" He said. "This is better than the turd I found last week," enjoying his treat right down to every little morsel, chewing smacking his teeth. "I got to find some more-of this delightful sweet treat," picking with bony fingers around the gaps in his teeth. "Yum. Yum, yummy!" So he started digging his way up! Up he dig, and when he was almost to the surface he heard the noise of stomping feet, smelled the bags filled with candy, and could hardly contain himself. And suddenly laid very-still-waiting for his chance to reach out of the ground and grab! Closer came the stomping of feet, and the more he could smell that tasty treat. And when the time was right when he’d reach out! He stopped. "I remember now!" he said as he thought. "That's how! I ended up here way down in the ground. Someone grabbed me-when I had a bag of sweets." © 1999 Merlyn Hearn |
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MsSouthernOrchid Member
since 2003-07-12
Posts 192 |
Merlyn, This is a cute little story, epecially now at Halloween time. So, the moral is, don't go munching on your candy in no graveyards! teehee |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
 sooo cute!! I'm going to have my brother read this! Love, |
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