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River
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0 posted 2003-10-17 09:32 PM



a long time ago in a village far far away....

A small persomn named Kjaeif squinted off into the distance as a strange vessel enveloped the galaxy with it's radiant, blazing light. "I wonder when the Vmoir are going to quit making a scene of their business" he said. " how long do we have to put up with this?" said Miewo, Kjaeif's small furry alien friend.  " I do not know, but we had better get home before they find us"  he said. as they headed for the door, which was only a few yards away, a loud, but small explosion of water erupted behind them, soaking them as they escaped. they ran inside, terrified, without looking behind them. "This is worse than I thought!" shouted Miewo through the noise that was still being made from the water. As they ran inside, soaking wet, Kjaeif looked franticly for his parents, who where sitting at the dining room table eating breakfast as if everything were perfectly fine. "Mother, Father, the Vmoir are attacking the main water supplies! we must retrieve only our most valued possessions and run to high ground before they destroy us!" said Kjaeif. looking up from the table, his mother scolded him saying; "Oh stop it Chancey dear, you've been reading to many books again, remember your dad just installed a new sprinkler system? Now go upstairs and dry yourself off - uh, make sure to get Chloe dried off too, she looks like a wet mop. When your finished, come down and eat your breakfast honey."  wet and confused, Chance ( for that is his real name) headed upstairs to the bathroom where he did as his mother had asked.
         After ridding himself of the infestation of hydrogen and oxygen molecules that made his clothes cling to his already cold skin, Kjaeif (for that is what he shall be called throughout the story from now on to avoid mistaken identity) sat down to enjoy consumption of the tasty entrĂ©e of pancakes and syrup, while his companion's meal consisted of less appetizing, yet nutritious roast mutton, or "kitty kibbles", which was what the label on the steel replica container read. "I take it you enjoyed watching the sunrise, Son." said Kjaeif's father, grinning as he scooped another forkful of pancakes into his mouth. "Yes, I much enjoy the sunrise syrup with the delicious homemade pancakes father." he replied. Rolling his eyes, Kjaef's father looked at Mother as if to say; "How long are we going to have to put up with this?"
      ...Meanwhile Master Nequoithest of the Vmoir species plotted other ways to attack the unsuspecting citizens and take over the galaxy. "When, oh when shall the universe finally be mine?" he questioned as he looked out the very large window in his space ship. "Patience my master, is our strongest alley" replied Inges., he then continued "When the children of the galaxy finally convince their parents that we are corrupting everything in their path, we shall then have our chance master. That is, your brilliant plan, is it not oh great one?" "Yesss...Yes it is Inges. Very good servant, very good. Now we shall wait, and watch. We shall see what happens to the weak and the vulnerable. We shall have our victory when our time comes."    

                                                               ...to be continued.
---ha, this was inspired by star wars. did anyone figure that out? go ahead and bash the cheesy story, but my ex-b/f said it was the funniest thing he ever heard, so there. lol. ---

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merlynh
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since 1999-09-26
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deer park, wa
1 posted 2003-10-18 02:40 AM


Cheesy--but tastie, even cute in some ways.  I'd love to see a rewrite of the improved one. But alas cheesy is cheesy and it would be.  
River
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since 2003-09-16
Posts 627
my own little world
2 posted 2003-10-18 02:49 PM


lol, if i get enough reply's to this, i might consider going back and working on it and adding the continuation to this...but it needs to definately be worth my time, since time is something i am becoming short of. =) thank you for commenting. you know, pizza is beginning to sound good to me right about now =).

              - River

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