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Fariegirl Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 147 |
Standing in the rain, she looked at him, love in her eyes. She loved him, yet he did not even know of her. She was only on the other side of the fence, yet it felt like standing on the other side of the world. She saw him look at her, but she turned her face. Standing in the rain, he looked at her. He loved her but he thought she knew nothing of him. There she was on the other side of the fence. He walked away never telling her of his love. ~*Love never said is love never felt.*~ |
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laurie Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 153canada, ontario |
good, but short... l'd 'luv' to see this with more detail... what happens to them? is there ANY hope? just me being curious, but l like. laurie. instead of rewriting it, maybe you should write a sequal to it... heh |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is extremely good, clever. The shift in perspective works well. It could be developed but I kinda like it as it is.....I guess it's all down to opinion in the end  Thanks for sharing, Luv, Liz xxx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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Fariegirl Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 147 |
hey if you want to know what happens later look at the cont. version. |
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