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IcyFlamez89 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 292Jersey City NJ |
I was...somewhere. Or was it nowhere? Maybe both, I don't know nor do I care, but I was there. No sky, no ground, nothing. Just a vast universe of blinding shades of black. It swirled. I drifted. Floating and sinking into the abyss. I lost all track of time. A second, a century, it didn't matter. I didn't matter. I let down the barriers I spent my entire life erecting, letting the darkness consume me. It wrapped me tighter, held me stronger. I became a part of it, or it a part of me. No light, no sound, no feeling, just is. A figure came to me suddenly. What it looked like I don't know. I just knew the figure was there, a blotch of black that was so much darker than the surrounding emptiness. "Hmm, another one. Why are you here?" it asked me in a low rasping voice, and its words sent the first emotion I've felt since I came here. Fear. "I don't know," I replied. "I don;t even know what this place is." "It's...a purgatory of sorts. A place for lost souls. Unworthy of heaven...and somehow escaped hell. Again, why are you here?" "I told you I don't know." Fear left me and was replaced by annoyance. I knew heaven would be so far away from me, but I never knew hell was about the same distance away. Accepted by neither and left to dissipate into this place. All I wanted in life was to be left alone. It cost me my life, but I attained at at last. But now this thing just popped out of nowhere and it felt like life all over again. "For the last time I don't know why I'm here so just leave me alone." "I will," it replied, "but not until I give you this advice. You are not the first person to become stranded here. This place is the ridge that separates heaven and hell. You must choose your direction. Go to the gates of paradise or to the river of fire and brimstone." He paused for a moment and moved. I suddenly saw a point of light, like a dim star, on one side, and another point on the opposite direction. "There is heaven. And there is hell. Choose you path. Nearly all the fallen choose the way to paradise, hoping to gain repentance along the way. The rest, so very few, went the other way, accepting the fate they deserved. Choose so you may begin. It takes an eternity of forevers to journey either way, and once you choose a path you cannot return. I do not know what happens when you reach your destination, if you reach it at all, so choose wisely." With that he disappeared, leaving me alone gain. choose a path... I wanted to go to heaven. Don't we all? but if I deserved it I'd be there right now, wouldn't I? The road to salvation is forever closed to me, my cries so very distant to the righteous. Hell was the only choice left. It was my fate. I deserved it. My penance for my sins. I closed my eyes and sighed. I took one step. Then another. Soon my feet were compelled to keep on walking. I couldn't turn, nor pause. My legs and feet moved in automation. But my path...I smiled. I was was walking to...I was walking to neither heaven nor hell, but deepper into the dark abyss, doomed to walk until my soul fades away like an echo. Where am I headed? I don't know. What will I do when I get there? Nothing. What if it leads to heaven? Then let me be judged. What if it's hell? Then let me burn. And what if it leads to nothing? Then I've reached my destination. Come...fade away with me, fade away....., fade... I am the result of a typical dysfuctional family [This message has been edited by IcyFlamez89 (05-21-2003 06:49 PM).] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I think you pasted it in twice... I also think it's really good. I'm not the one to put in all the critical analysis, not enough know-how, but I found this read very well, and the tone and mood reflected the subject matter, which was cool. Thanks for sharing. What is it for? Or you just wrote it for the hell of it? Either way, thumbs up from this end... Liz xxx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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IcyFlamez89 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 292Jersey City NJ |
ooh, sorry. fixed it I am the result of a typical dysfuctional family |
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laurie Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 153canada, ontario |
hey, loved this... only someone who really feels like that, that they don't deserve to be happy, can truly undertsand... thanx. l'm puttin u in my library... good work. laurie. |
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