navwin » Main Forums » Passions in Prose » Day dream
Passions in Prose
Post A Reply Post New Topic Day dream Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
paladin
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930
Pensacola,Fl.

0 posted 2001-11-20 11:43 AM


    The moon turns on the axis of dieing.While lifes light waits in small corners ready to spring forth into fires of happiness.Go again you great mellow lamp of night.Smolter and clammer in the toms of the living.Sky line aglow hearding the comming of dawn.Stars fliker pale and shimmer on the rim.Comes the sun.Great fire chariot of the pagan gods.Burn crisp the barren ground in your path.Raise the snowy clouds to awesome heights.Come now you soothing rains.Cry for the drought.Wring yourselfs as thunder roams your breast.Sing you cooling breeze on the fresh plowed fields.Caress the new green sprouts.Shake the mighty mane of the oak tree dry.Steam from the highway rises into the sky.See the sun weary and red from the labors of the day.It lies on the ocean waiting for the night.Steams of painted clouds aloft pull dark shadows across a sleepy land.There's a star.I saw it wink at me.It was hiding behind a purple cloud.The moon rises one day older waneing away.Come you moon.Shine on me.
Day is done gone the sun from the hill.

paladin

© Copyright 2001 Robert E. Jackson - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
1 posted 2001-11-22 03:26 PM



An interesting read, and I would probably enjoy it more if my English teacher's spirit weren't hovering over my shoulder asking me, "where are his spaces between the periods?" {~,^}

Thank you!

fractal007
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

2 posted 2001-11-22 05:45 PM


Whoa!  I like this a lot.  Can u say apostrophe??  Great work on this story.  I love the poetic language you use to express a message in so many different ways.  THe imagery, the language...wow!

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

Enchantress
Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
3 posted 2001-12-01 04:12 PM


Paladin~Great read here with wonderful imagery!  Enjoyed this, but then, I enjoy everything you write.     Excellent!  Nancy.

"A dream is a wish your heart makes..."

LadySofia
Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238
FL., USA
4 posted 2001-12-04 01:41 AM


This actually evoked fond memories; my mother quite often quotes your last line at the strangest of times...masterful prose. Thanks for the awesome read!

^_^ LadySofia

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Main Forums » Passions in Prose » Day dream

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary