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Rebelious Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 57Kansas, USA |
My friend Dustin, is a funny guy. Makes everyone laugh. He walks through the halls in HighSchool, messing with all the girls. One day he made a mistake he later learned... He came across this cute girl. He often spoke of a girl like this. He sat down beside here and started to talk to her.. He never really thought she liked him, until one day she came into his studyhall. In there he got up and set by her. Throughout the conversation she was asking him questions on what he finds atractive on a girl.. Well it seems she was talking about her little sister. So Dustin tried that little thing but nothing there. He found out a week or so later that, that girl actually liked him.. So he called her on the phone and talked to her a couple of nights, Dustin useally was a shy guy and never really went after girls like this but he asked her if she would go steady with him. Dustin soon found out that she was on probation for doing alot of bad stuff, and she smokes....Well that was all ok cuz he had the feeling in his heart that she would get off soon and everything would be fine. Well she got off a week later... Lucky him he thought everything was gonna be grand. Well it was not ok. She was going out every weeked he never knew where she was. One day at school, she says "I have something to tell you but I am gonna write you a note" Something stung his heart... he received the note and went to class... the contents of the note sent a pain rigth through him. The not read: Dust I lied to you about my sexual history I am not a virgin: this right here hurt him cuz he infact is one : I don't know why I lied about it but I did. Saturday night, in my drunken state of mind I forgot about loyalty, and comitment. If you don't already know what we did maybe its for the best: Well Dustin didn't think about the what they did part till later. Well he rushed to her class to talk to her, but she said she had to go to another hour to get some work done.. So he spent his whole next hour thinking of that... He should of broke up with her right then.. Something changed in Dustin that day... I couldn't quite put my finger on it then but I do know now what it was. Well on with the story.. He acted like everything was fine... but he couldn't dispurse the thought of her and another guy from his head... he walked her to all your classes as useual, but she wouldn't touch him give him a kiss or anything... well the next day still hurt by yesterday's news, she acted the same way, like she didn't want him around... so that day around lunch time he broke up with her... he cried all his last hour... like a little baby... this was unuseal for Dustin for he never cried in his whole life in school. She called him that night and apologized.. they got back together... but later that week still thoughts rushing through his head.. went and cheated on her.... he fighting not telling her... for like 4 days he kept that from her... then fineally told her.. she always talked about giveing people 2nd chances.. but when she told him that she said, "what stuff do you have in my locker?" that hurt doesn't so much... she hung up. Dustin cried allnight long in misery. Not know if she felt the same.. Well she called him and they worked things out. So now they are back together again... a couple of weeks later.. she is acting the same as useual.. not acting like she wants him... he writes her a letter cuz she wont ever talk about the problems they have... she rights "F U" on it and give it back.. So he gets up right there and walks off, she grabs his arm and say Dustin dont go please. He ripped her hand off, she held at him Don't ever call me again, swearing as she did this. Well he gets home and he finds on the caller id she called just a little bit ago.. she called again he doens't answer... she calls again.. he don't pick up... He gets on checks his e-mail.. and she wrote a note that tore is heart to peices.... right as he gets done reading it, she calls... He picks up... they talk alnight long.. and are back together.. things were going great.. they were so happy, but then she became noneshalaunt again. He gave every piece of his heart to her... but she treats him like crap. He tells her how much he loves her, how beautiful she is.. she goes out on weekends and doesn't call... the funny thing is, is he still loves her more than anything in his whole life. He puts all his effort into the relationship and gets nothing back. They are still together, but conflicts on his part all the time.. She never has any worries it seems. |
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Sharon Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 53Within a whisper |
Hi...I'd really like to see this with some paragraphs...long ones are hard to read. Are you going to be a writer? How do you handle critiques? |
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Rebelious Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 57Kansas, USA |
Sorry about that.. Nah I'm not gonna be a writer, I would like too, but I don't really have the time to do anything. I have some good ideas I think. Plus my puncuation and grammer isn't all that great... I looked through my story and saw that  |
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