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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
Hello, ...do you know me? I'm someone important in your life! I'm feeling good about myself and I wanted a few minutes with you to share the feeling. Everything looks cheery and comfortable. I guess you could say I'm feeling very good about myself. No sense at all of fear or guilt, no worry, no shame or suspicion, just good, glad, proud feelings. Can you guess who I am yet? Perhaps we've been out of touch too long, let me tell you some more about myself, maybe you'll remember. I've been with you when lots of things happened. Some not so good for you. ...those times when you felt scared for a long time or when you were put down and hurt. Do you remember some of those things? Maybe you sort of forgot about me being there, but I was. I remember times when you choked up with that pain in your throat and you couldn't stop the tears. ...how you huddled close to yourself and held your breath and just held on and it hurt so much. I remember when you were so scared that you'd do things wrong but you didn't know how to do them right and that hurt so much. Oh, I remember how you hurt. You’ve probably tried to forget and that's O.K. Nobody should have to remember all those things. Like that time in school when you were so embarrassed and you had to apologize. I hate to bring those things up, but you sort of forgot about me too. Anyway, perhaps we could meet and have a pleasant time together. Would you do that for me? I have so much to share with you now. We have been close several times over the years and I saw you, but I don't think you recognized me. I was also there for some good times. I hope you haven't forgotten them, too? Oh, the glorious things! ...discovering the smell of flowers, and the smell of pies cooking and the smell of grass when it was just cut. I remember the little brook we sat beside and chewed on the sweet stems of tall grass when you pull them out from the top. And the big slow moving clouds in the warm blue sky? And crickets chirping in the evening? And snuggling down in a nice warm bed when it's cold outside? Remember how good it felt to be happy, and how cute those kittens were, and hugging the dog around the neck! Remember the wonderful feeling once in a while when everything seemed to be so easy to understand, when God gave us that great big feeling in our heart and we knew that we could do anything when we grew up. Have you forgotten those things too? Well, like I said, I do want to get back together with you, soon. Let’s go over to my place and talk. I want you to feel good about yourself. I know how to get rid of all those bad feelings, too. And when you're here there won't be any room for them at all. It’s like magic. You’ll just forget all the bad stuff for a while. I’ll take care of it. Do you know who I am yet? Let me tell you now. I’m that dear little person still inside you from when you were small and could see as far as the stars. Remember? Oh, let me hug you and we’ll go it together from now on. It will come back to you. I’ve always been here, but I’ve been on the outside looking at you through the window of life for too long. I’ve been watching you grow inside a lot lately. Now it’s time we got back together. |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Stan~ This was an extremely interesting piece. It made me think... it hurt my head! LOL. Wonderful piece, I enjoyed it. Keep writing. "Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today" ~Broadway Musical RENT~ *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
Thank you Dawn, Some things are just inside and have to get out. I wonder how many people can recall the many decades back when there was an innocence and purity that really still exists. I hope this may awaken one or two. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I can't begin to tell you how much this one affected me...I have been at war with myself for all of my life I think. I've been thinking about this subject much lately, and as a matter of fact, just recently said to a friend---"Somebody needs to take care of me, and it might as well be me, since I'm the one around me the most." (smile, my friend) And thank you for this. |
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Stan Member
since 2001-01-01
Posts 120Inland Empire Southern California |
How nice, Serenity! And how true it is that there are many me's in a me. It can become a choice to go back to the rare purity of early childhood and start building again on that. Takes a lot of maturity actually, some courage and a little encouragement from an affectionate friend. May I hold your hand and walk with you back there then? Oops this we are beginning to sound like an item. Shhhhhhhhhhh Some day soon I will submit a little sonnet about the white flower of purity ... Edelweiss I can't read back over it without thinking it was written by another hand. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
ahh yes...Halfway through I sensed the inner child from long ago that we all neglect. I love this piece of writing! Can I be your willful breeze, Come to touch, Your heart to ease? |
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purpleprose New Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 3 |
How could you know how I have thinking lately? This piece should be used as a poster to remind us all of who we are! Too often we forget to care for ourselves. Purple |
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Pearls_Of_Wisdom Member
since 2000-09-02
Posts 175 |
Hi Stan, I enjoyed the read very much. Right from the start, I was absorbed. I think too many people forget about themselves, or the little parts of themselves, and your story emphasizes that we are hurting our little childlike self by ignoring it. The narration and description seemed very sincere and honest, and that's always a good thing. I do like it very much as is, but I have one idea: do you need to tell us directly who is talking? Is there maybe a way to end it without coming right out and telling us? Personally, I got the picture before the last paragraph. Anyway, just a thought. I thought your ending was good too. I'll look forward to more of your work, Ashley |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Stan, I'm at that crossroads in a person's life. You know the one where you're not a child but you're not an adult yet. Yes, a teenager. I'm 15. And it's the hardest year yet of my life. I desperatley want to shoot ahead into my adulthood or back into my childhood. I can't do either one. This piece showed me that there are many sides to a person. I never want to completley get rid of my inner child. So when I reach adult hood, I'll pull out a paper with your piece and remember. Thanks for writing. Joy Our doubts are traitors, And make us loose the good we oft might win By fearing to attempt. ~Shakespeare |
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