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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
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Do you remember when we use to walk along the path? you know the one..where the pink dogwoods and the snapdragons framed the babbling brook.. and the garden of monarda danced with the emerald feathered hummingbirds as they quenched their thirst in the morning sun.. Do you remember? Remember how we use to sit in the shade of the nook? and we would dream that the day would never end and the sky would always be a topaz blue, and at night we would dream in each others arms until the dawn would awaken us with the scent of ballerina crab apples. Do you remember how we would sit in the gazebo and get lost in the ethereal moonlight. You dont remember do you?...the way you said i would never get old..you said i was the prettiest girl you ever dated... Remember when you whispered " i love you" for the first time and I did not hear you because you whispered softly in my ear. Where did those days go? The love we once shared..was it just a preview of an up and coming movie?..or just a flashback of something to remember as we grow old...together? < !signature--> A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 10-24-2000).] |
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merlynh Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 411deer park, wa |
Thanks, I enjoyed the read. A nice reminder not all of us feel as deeply. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wow, Victoria, I think that was very touching. Good question. I did a poem of the same name, much different, though. Seems to me they too easily forget. Sandra |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Merlynh..They probably feel deeply just do not have a good memory thats all..ha..  thank you for reading.. Sandra..So glad you enjoyed..thank you for peeking .. ~Victoria~< !signature--> A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) [This message has been edited by Victoria (edited 10-24-2000).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Kinda fence-sitting here Victoria! Are you sure you meant to put this in here? Chris |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Fence sitting? well not sure what you mean but will be happy for you to tell me Christopher..Didnt think anyone would read anything longer then that..as I dont like to read long proses myself..and yes i meant to put it in here..to answer your question. I see some people did like it..sorry if you didnt.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Victoria - My apologies if that came across wrong! I in no way meant that I didn't like it! What I meant by fence-sitting was that I see this more as a poem than a prose piece! If you intentionally put it in here (some people do accidentaly put their work in the wrong forum sometimes...) than si bueno! I did like it! Just making sure! Chris (ps - personally, I love the longer prose pieces! ) |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you for responding back Christopher..i appreciate it..i usually dont write prose but i do have a few longer ones..ill see about digging them up ha..yes wasnt sure if i should of posted it the open forum or not..no apologies necessary.. ~Victoria A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Silky...James |
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starwatcher New Member
since 2008-05-05
Posts 4The Caribean |
I really enjoyed this write,particularly this beautiful line "the garden of monanda danced........" This seems like a lovely garden wish i could see it. |
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eternally_singing Member
since 2007-12-18
Posts 123PA, United States |
I greatly enjoyed reading this piece. It created some vivid images and it made me think how the things we remember and feel to be important may not be significant to those around us. At night a candle's brighter than the sun |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Thank you all for your sweet comments. I havent been here in a long time so thats why im just responding. ~V~ |
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