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MagnoliaBlue
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since 2000-05-12
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0 posted 2000-05-18 07:55 PM


*Note...I don't know anything about prose, except that it isn't poetry...some people confuse the two...I don't, but I still have to tell myself sometimes  not to rhyme.Please excuse me if one slips out.*

                ~TRUST?~

I shouldn't have trusted her.I told myself that I had known her all my life...so I should feel safe in trusting her.

Many times in the past she treated me wrong and did things that were killing to my soul...but you see, I had known her all my life.

I bought her car from her. Paid a lot of money...more than bluebook...because I knew her all my life and wanted to do a little ' extra' for her.I also bought her furniture, bedding, microwave, refrigerator, beautiful lingerie and other things.  

In payment for her car.

She was going to give me the pink  slip... honest...and after-all, I trusted her, no matter what...because I had known her all my life.

I had possession of the car. My car.Bought and paid for...by me!

One morning...last year...7AM...while I was sitting here woking on the computer in my panties and a half-shirt...the sheriffs men knocked on my door.

I wasn't dressed, so I looked out the window,saw who it was and I wondered what they wanted.

As I was getting dressed, to answer the door...they began banging on my door with their night sticks.

I hurried into the living room and opened the door. They were standing there with their hands on their guns.A huge officer on each side of the door and another one directly in front.

They told me that they had a warrant for my arrest for embezzlement.They said I had an option, if I chose quickly and quietly.

After them making all that noise...I was embarrassed and humiliated...ashamed...even though I had done nothing wrong..all my neighbors in my apartment building..were outside...watching the big circus...three sheriffs men and one small woman...and three other cops down in the parking lot.

Six officers...come to arrest a desperado...who's only crime was TRUST.

The option they gave me, was to turn over the car to them or be hand-cuffed and taken to jail.

I asked them..."can she do this? I paid her money and other items...can she really take my car?

Their answer? ..."Yes, she has the pink-slip!"

I asked,"Does she have to give back my money and the other things?"  

They said,"She has the pink slip.Are you turning over the car or going to jail?"

I had no desire to be handcuffed, in front of all my neighbors...no desire to go to jail.

I turned the car over to them.

They went away and left me broken hearted, humiliated, and hurt.Deeper than I had ever been hurt before!

I never did see my money and other things again.Hard to prove the money and things were for the purchase of the car. She got to keep all of that, plus the car.

I shouldn't have trusted her.I told myself that I had known her all my life...so I should feel safe in trusting her.

Many times in the past she treated me wrong and did things that were killing to my soul...but you see, I had known her all my life....


...she... gave... birth... to... me!


MagnoliaBlue


 

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WolfsMate
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since 2000-01-14
Posts 121
New York
1 posted 2000-05-18 08:42 PM


I can only imagine the hurt you must have felt at this betrayal. No one can hurt you like your family can. Excellent story.

 "You never have to worry...Never fear for I am near"

netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
2 posted 2000-05-18 10:57 PM


Wow, kept me on edge while reading this.
Well done ----and what a sad, sad ending -
MagnoliaBlue - doesn't this irritate the
heck out of you?  My family has done that
to each other, and I have learned blood
is not thicker than water.

Hugs for your pain

netswan

MagnoliaBlue
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since 2000-05-12
Posts 367

3 posted 2000-05-19 06:48 PM


WolfsMate and netswan...thank you both for the kind words.  I learned a valuable lesson from that episode...they seem to stick better when accompanied by pain.Thanks for the hugs , netswan.

MagnoliaBlue

 

Dawn Eclipse
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since 2000-01-31
Posts 637
The Horsehead Nebula
4 posted 2000-05-20 10:29 AM


That was a great story.  That's exactly how you write prose.     

That must have hurt a lot.  Family can often do the most damage to a person's soul with their actions.  

Well done.

 "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*

MagnoliaBlue
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since 2000-05-12
Posts 367

5 posted 2000-05-20 12:41 PM


Thanks Dawn...

I was hopping around to a lot of 'poetry sites' before I found PASSIONS and 95% of them were NOTHING BUT prose...though they were all calling it 'poetry'...so it kept me on the mad hunt .

Thanks again.
MB

 

Ardonida
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since 2000-05-18
Posts 76

6 posted 2000-05-21 05:38 PM


Hey there,
OY!! This was so sad!! Reminded me agian why I was not talking to my mother for three years!!! I just hope that I will not have to read something like this about myself, written by my child...
A.

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
7 posted 2000-05-24 05:35 PM


Wow, what a bomb shell the last line was.  That kind of treatment from mother....what is happening to the world.
A lesson to be learned...business is business and trust is secondary.  Get the paperwork, always.
If a mother can treat a child that way, there is nothing else sacred in this world.
~~nice writing~

Irie
Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
8 posted 2000-05-24 06:16 PM


I've always felt strongly against never buying things from
family, but for other reasons.
This is absolutely horrifying. I'm stunned!
What an awful thing to do to family, what's worse, you own child!
My heart goes out to you!
Great Big Warm Hugs to you MB!
Well done with the Prose too!  


[This message has been edited by Irie (edited 05-24-2000).]

MagnoliaBlue
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since 2000-05-12
Posts 367

9 posted 2000-05-25 02:53 AM


Irie,Ardonida, and Danny...
Thank you for the nice comments...they are appreciated. Lesson well learned.


MB

 

Ruby dagger
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since 1999-08-01
Posts 76
Wyoming, MN, U.S.A
10 posted 2000-05-25 06:23 PM


Oh, how sad! It's stories like this that makes me appreciate my family.  hug Great writting.  

 Luv

Kelly

"Everyone has to grow old, but it's a choice to grow up" -Vernon Lee-


Gossamerwings
Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207

11 posted 2000-07-27 10:15 PM


Yep,MaggieB...I remember this well.
I am glad you are out of that now.
You and me both.
Way to go girl!  


Gossamerwings ;)

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
12 posted 2000-07-28 04:11 PM


you honestly suprised me with this story...i didnt think that it would end the way it did...i give you 2 thumbs up...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

Christopher
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since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
13 posted 2000-07-29 09:55 PM


let me just say: *ouch*

Thank you for sharing!!!

&dispose
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since 2000-01-30
Posts 18

14 posted 2000-07-30 01:52 AM


I would say I hope that didn't happen, but it's too pathetic not to be included in this fallacy we call our "world".  At any rate, it seems you ignored all of the advanced warnings, and paid dearly for it.
Your point was well-recieved by the end of the story, but it would seem that greed betrayed trust, which is why (especially in America) everyone needs to cover their own ass.  I hope you have recovered from this episode and that you won't make the same mistake twice.
Remeber, there's a thin line between love and hate.


"You know it's not only madmen who listen to fools."
- Iron Maiden

&dispose

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15 posted 2000-07-30 05:01 AM


Sending great big hugs your way

(((((((((((((((HUGS)))))))))))))))))))

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