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Brenda Winniford Junior Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 31 |
The "Human Soul" is a lot like a flower.They both require food,nurturing,support,and unconditional love.If these 'essentials' are not provided,both shall die and whither away! The "Human Spirit",ceases to exist. While on this planet,called "Earth",we are given choices and learning tools,in order to cope with a 'complex' and 'chaotic' world. We need to look deep into "The Windows of Our Souls" and correct any negative 'reflections'in our life.When our view becomes 'distorted',then it becomes difficult,to validate another,or to see basic elements,of the "Human Spirit" We can 'revitalize' the "Human Spirit".We can become the best human being,that we can be! We become the a better person and find an 'inner peace',and be able,to validate a 'lost soul',provide emotional support,and provide unconditional love. If Heart-felt efforts are applied on a daily basis,you will be qualified,to receive your 'just rewards' on "Judgement Day!" Remember,that courtesy,respect,forgiveness,and unconditional love,will change your life and those around you forever! |
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Brenda Winniford Junior Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 31 |
Hello! Can someone tell me if I placed this writing in the wrong place? I haven't received any responses! I would appreciate, any info or advice on this matter. I don't know what to call this writing . I call it a Reflecton,but it may not belong here in Prose! Thank you! Brenda W. [This message has been edited by Brenda Winniford (edited 03-19-2000).] |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Hi Brenda. I think you are in the right place with this piece. With prose it is either streaming over with poeple or at a slow but steady trickle. Unfortunately you have hit the slow cycle. Be patient and the responses will come, it is not like open #6 here. I understand where you were going with this piece, you have used many parethesis and it feels very cliche-ish to me. I think your arguement would be much stronger if you were to go into more detail. JMHO  |
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Brenda Winniford Junior Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 31 |
Marilyn> Thank you for your response. I don't understand eactly what you mean about more detail. The writing is in generalization, i meant it to be this way. As far as puncuations,I don't know much about hows,whens,wheres,and whys. If one wasn't into critiquing,then they would read it like any layman wold, I have received many positive comments on this paper I understand this is your honest opinion, and I am not dissing you for that opinion,but I need to learn more about presentation and how to use punctuations. Are you willing to send me an E-mail on a little more information. I would appreciate it very much. [This message has been edited by Brenda Winniford (edited 03-19-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is good, but I too wonder at the use of so many quotation marks..such as the word 'revitalization'..why was that placed in quotes...? You may want to check out the English Workshop, ask questions..that is the way we are all learning. Writing is hard work sometimes....  |
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Mellon Collie Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 49united states of america |
dear brenda, this is a short, but wonderfully consistant piece i love the theme you've chosen and i follow your ideas well throughout the piece. the others are correct about some of the punctuational errors, however. might want to look into that.sincerely, the beautiful freak |
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Brenda Winniford Junior Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 31 |
Hi! I appreciate everyones' opinions on this piece. I can understand about the punctuations and other errors,that is why I have hesitated,to send my work in,because I know I am very weak in this area. Aside from the errors,I feel that the thought brings home a very "important" message and I hope I was able to convey that to everyone. Thanks again,I will look into some tutorials in this area. Brenda W. ps. Marilyn,I think I accidentally deleted you email! Could you contact me on the Messenger? Thanks! [This message has been edited by Brenda Winniford (edited 03-26-2000).] |
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