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Saturday Night at the Golden Boar |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
It's Saturday night. Disco night at the Golden Boar Saloon. Polyester suits and cowboy boots. Saturday Night Fever meets the Urban Cowboy. But I digress. He saunters into the bar. Across the room, a glow. He looks. Fire engine red hair atop a goddess. Matching fire engine red fingernails and toe nails. He momentarily ponders, why isn't she wearing shoes? But he digresses. He ogles the slightly irregular mounds of her ample bosom above her fake look-a-like wonder bra. Their eyes meet across the smoke filled room. He starts to hum, Smoke Gets in Your Eyes. There is an instant attraction. He is drawn to her like a gull to a dump. Delete... He is drawn to her like a socially conscious gull to a politically correct sanitary landfill. It is as if no one else is in the room. There isn't. They start towards each other. In slow motion. She is humming the theme from Chariots of Fire. They meet. They embrace. He gazes into her eyes. A deep blue pool on the right; azure green sea on the left. Their lips meet in a liplock reminiscent of Bull Dog Bob Brown in a Texas Death Match. They both see flashing red lights, hear sirens, and feel a rising heat. They start to hum, Come on baby light my fire. I apologize to Jim Morrison. Again I digress. Suddenly, their passion is doused by the stream of the firemen's hoses. The room is invaded by firemen to contain the conflaguration that has engulfed the room. They decide to leave, never to see each other again. Things just got too hot too quick. The end. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 02-20-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This read like a Mike Hammer novel! I loved it..the imagery was fantastic! LOL  |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
"Unique" doesn't even describe this well. It's definetly an interesting read. "He is drawn to her like a gull to a dump. Delete... He is drawn to her like a socially conscious gull to a politically correct sanitary landfill." These lines were great in my opinion, LOL. The actions of the characters and the comparisons used were great, enjoyed this. A writer's soul is on paper etched. In flames I shall not be consumed, but reborn. -- Abrahm Simons |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Now I got it. Prose, not pro's. Sheeesh... I didn't realize amateurs were allowed in here.. but I digress. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This was wonderful Tim!! Please grace us with your presence again soon! LOL |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I appreciate the responses. Thank you for your comments. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Tim, I loved this. So seductively funny that I almost....delete.... Very good and I want more! |
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