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Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
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By a big lake

0 posted 1999-11-13 04:19 PM


Rising above the tangled overgrowth, she surveys stormy skies above, the lush vegetation beneath her. Higher she climbs, higher, looking. She spies the river which leads to the falls and the pool of her youth.Now she's gliding toward the thundering tower of water and the stillness just beyond. The dark river radiates coolness while the falls encompass the surrounding greenery with mist. She floats into the treeline and, with a grace undeniably hers alone, alights on the branch. The branch cradle of her birth. The cycle completed, her burden loosed, she dips and swoops toward the curtain, the ever-moving wall. Searching for something, someplace she's not been before.To the left, an opening appears and she darts in with a flutter. It's there that she falls to the moist floor of the cavern, and allows her once beautiful, now ragged, yet majestic wings to droop for the last time. She is complete.

© Copyright 1999 Deep Blue Me - All Rights Reserved
Tara Simms
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since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA
1 posted 1999-11-13 06:52 PM


This is beautiful.
X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
Oregon
2 posted 1999-11-13 09:55 PM


I enjoyed this
~X~

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"We have loved the stars too fondly to be fearful of the night" (Tombstone epitaph of two amateur astronomers)

Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
3 posted 1999-11-14 02:19 AM


DBM, I love this, it is beautiful, wistful....**sigh**

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.



Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
4 posted 1999-11-14 04:42 AM


very nice piece of prose, D.B. A very enjoyable read...profound finish.


Michael

JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
5 posted 1999-11-14 07:06 AM


Very beautiful David. I feel she was waiting for the right place to be reborn...

Enoyed very much CT


Jenny Lee

Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
6 posted 1999-11-14 10:21 PM


Thank you everyone, I actually enjoyed writing this, not painful at all. I'm really glad you liked it, really. DB smiling widely.

DB

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And the men who hold high places
Must be the ones who start
To mold a new reality
Closer to the heart.
===RUSH===

Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
7 posted 1999-11-16 02:11 AM


Very much good...I liked this...my only regret is that it was so short...
Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
8 posted 1999-11-17 06:40 PM


Very beautiful indeed! I echo Christopher.....I wanted this piece to go on and on .......extremely good writng here Deep Blue Me......

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A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!



[This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 11-17-1999).]

Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
9 posted 1999-11-18 09:12 AM


Thanks C and P!
I can never tell about my own stuff. I only know if it expresses what I wanted it to, not if it is bad.

DB

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And if the band you're in starts playin' different tunes,
I'll see you on the dark side of the moon.
==P. Floyd==

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