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merlynh Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 411deer park, wa |
Feel free to give my some input. Don't be afraid to hurt my feelings. Post a reply. Thanks. RUFUSS "Ah shucks Ma. I didn't mean no harm. Weren't just me and boys who ate it," I said. "What do you mean it weren't just you and the boys? Who else and the devil was here? Except you and the boys." She were down right mad. I don't blame her. Ah shucks! She was taping her foot. I knew I was-in trouble for sure. "It was Rufuss!" I shouted. "He ate a whole pie all by himselves," I was shaking my head. "Yes-um, yes-um. He did!" Her eyes lit up like a stick of dynamite after it goes off. "You knows what happens when Rufuss eats cherry pie don't you?" She raised her eye brows, titled her head at me. And went, reaching for the switch. Why, I was out of there before two shakes of the dog tale. I'd hardly left the porch when Ma called. "Just freeze right there, boy!" Standing on the porch pointing at me with her finger. Waving it too. But I weren't scar-d. I knew I could out run her. As, as long as there was room. But get stuck in that house with that switch in her hand and you-s sure to get your backside beaten goo-d. "You get you ass in-da town and pick up some potatoes. And some flour too. Or your not going to any dinner." "But, but. Ma..... I ain't got no money. Un-less-in ya go-na give me some. Ma....?" I says. "You not getting any! I am not feeding your lazy ass. Anymore. Unless-in you. Start helping out. And take Ruffuss with you." Weren't fair. Just weren't fair. Them boys was causing me nothing but trouble. They. Running off and leaving me to catch the snip. That be it what they did. Made a plum fool out of me. Weren't may fault I wasn't educated. "Come-un Rufuss! I hollered. He didn't even left his head, just opened his eyes. "Get up Rufuss. Will you get up and come on..... Please.....?" You had to be polite like to Rufuss less-in you didn't want him to listen. He were stuburn that way. And sure enough just as soon as I had said "please" he got up off his ass. Weren't no running race and it took awhile but finally he were standing next to me. Wide eyed and wiggly tailed. "Were off to town Ruffus." I said. Him just looking at me like I was crazy. You know sometimes I think he's smarter then me. "Good dog. Rufuss." I said patting his head. He be your friend just as long as you were nice to him. But talk mean to him or look him in the eye and he'd go for the throat. Other than that he seemed to be just an plain old hound dog. I was plumb tried by the time I got to town and couldn't wait to get a drink of water. And when I got to town there they was. As Ma called them, "The Boys." Why, they was shooting their guns, kissing the girls and falling in the mud. Wasn't too long until the Marshall had-um in jail. What's with all the carrying on that they'd done. Heck, it almost made it worth the walk to town. Not as much as visiting them in jail. "Hello boys," I says. "Looks like your fun is plum over." I could see that they didn't like my smiling. Looked like all they could do is breath in. When they finally did blow it out, they looked mean. "You boys didn't even invite me to town to have a drink." I said laughing. "Just helped me finish off them pies and. Took off!" Why they looked to be a flock of chickens running from a bobcat. With their feather's all sticking up. And me just standing, wondering why? Until they started trying to reach threw the bars. "Let me at him!" Jake was saying. While the rest of them said "Not if I don’t get to him first." Then it were like the whole world just stopped at once. Everyone's eyes got wide and water-ie dropped their mouths and froze. One then another says, "Eew." I look over and Rufuss who was looking up at me. Sort of looked like he were smiling. I do believe he were proud. He even seemed pleased. You know I just went and left that jailhouse. I felt like I'd give them boys time to sober up. People do get mean when they drink. You know about me telling Ma? I didn't have any money? Well the town give me those potatoes and flour. Were something I do recall? Was it? Something? Like? "Just get out of town." I guess it don't rightly matter now. But them folks in town sure could be nice. May be they heard about how mean Rufuss could be if-in you weren't polite. Talking about polite. Them boys just didn't seem to want to come over and visit Rufuss and me no more. I guess the word is out. "Are you going to come? Or am going to have to throw it out in the dirt. So you can. Eat with Rufuss." "Haw Ma." © 1999 by Merlyn Hearn |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Welcome to Passions in Prose!  I like your story though I think it could do with more shelving, meaning better paragraphing. The mispellings do add to the effect of the boy's dialogue though. We will shortly be posting guidelines to that effect. ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 10-09-1999).] |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Goods story,has a lot of potential! ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. [This message has been edited by Dragoness (edited 10-09-1999).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I enjoyed your story, at first I thought you were misspelling to much till I realized it was the way it was supposed to sound, it gave an interesting effect. |
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merlynh Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 411deer park, wa |
Thank you for the input. I enjoy trying something different with my writing. Thank you for your reply. |
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