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Noob101
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0 posted 04-01-2009 09:09 PM       View Profile for Noob101   Email Noob101   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Noob101


Hey, so I met this girl on vacation and fell in love with her.  I guess it was a fling, but she lived kinda close but didn't want to see me again.

I wanted to write her a poem since shes into that kind of stuff, like writing along other things.  Just wanted to know if you guys could help me since I'm not a good writer and don't want to make this a mushy poem.  I'll post up some ideas when I get the chance.

Thanks  
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1 posted 04-01-2009 09:57 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Hi, Noob.

Writing a poem is a serious process of heart.

What is it that you might like to tell her?

Start there,

and you'll have what you want.

Or, since you've begun here as an interested participant, just read, and remember: what you write is yours; what others write, is theirs. Do not copy someone else's work as yours.

But if you find something in the "love" connection that you like, contact the author/poet, and ask them if you can share it: then you can go to the icon that tells you about poetry e-cards....

and share away.

Just realize that you cannot make someone elses' words, your own.

Sunshine

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2 posted 04-02-2009 12:50 AM       View Profile for Noob101   Email Noob101   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Noob101

Hello, well this is what I got so far. Tell me what you think

The first time I saw you
My eyes were drawn to you
If I could go back in time
To be with you just one more time
You're voice sends tingles down my spine
Are you sure those are your real eyes?
Because I was mesmerized
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3 posted 04-07-2009 11:21 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Noob, I wrote this 'cause I've had the asme thing happen. You can give this to her but I get credit like Sunshine said.


There was never a simple glance
for you already caught my eye
Like gravity taking control of me
Just answer my question, why?

Why is it that time won't allow
To turn back an hour or two
To bask in your presence
But if only you just knew

That this love for you is unconditional
That its honest, I swear
For my heart is on my sleeves
Leaving me open and bare

So close your eyes my love
Tell me something true
Is it me?
Because I surely love you...


-Zach

We all flirt with the tiniest notion of self-conclusion in one simple motion.  

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4 posted 04-16-2009 08:18 PM       View Profile for Noob101   Email Noob101   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Noob101

Thats pretty good man but its a bit to deep for my situation.  
 
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