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Roberta Little
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since 12-18-2001
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beloit wi usa


0 posted 01-04-2002 09:58 PM       View Profile for Roberta Little   Email Roberta Little   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Roberta Little

"I want to marry you."
That's what I heard you say,
"I want to spend my life with you
eact and every day.
I want to wake up to you,
your smiling, peaceful face.
These things I want for all time.
And I pray,
that God will make you mine.
I was confused and I was scared,
but now my head has cleared.
I know what I want-
it's you by my side."
To hear you say these things to me
was music to my ears.
For my wish is the same as yours;
that we should never part.
I don't dare say my thoughts aloud
but I hope you do know
the love that flows for you
is true.
I hope you know that I too want us to be joined.
To be together,
forever,
til death do us part.
I want to marry you too.
© Copyright 2002 roberta little - All Rights Reserved
strbbux
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since 12-19-2001
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1 posted 01-05-2002 05:38 PM       View Profile for strbbux   Email strbbux   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for strbbux

What a lovely proposal, needs a little help with structure and I think someone else could help you more than I. nice poem. floria
punksmurf
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2 posted 01-15-2002 06:36 PM       View Profile for punksmurf   Email punksmurf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for punksmurf

uuummmmm, maybe i'm just a cynical b_*_*, but think you need to stop reading cliched, cheesy love poems, they're taking you nowhere but the bottomless pit of ushy mushy pointless, i-could-never-live-without-you crappy poems, yes this is critical anysis. come on, he wants to marry you not read some cheesy, unoriginal rhyming poem about what he wants to hear, get some sense up there! this is marriage, not eternity, and don't give me any 'true love' crap, how old are you, and what fairy tales have been spewing this into your ears, and most importantly, why have you been listening?!?! give him truth, and usually the truth isn't an overly-tired rhyming poem about eternity and that andless boringness called true love.
~Me
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