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Dance Of The Flames-IGNORE THIS ONE

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I am very unsure of this and could use some help. Could someone please comment on it. It seems to me like it could be better, but I don't know where. Thanks, floria


Dance Of The Flames

I watch the flickering flames in the hearth,
Dancers in red tights and gold gowns.
Leaping and jumping with elegant grace,
As they move to the crackling sounds.

They twist and twirl over flaming logs
Their arms reaching out to take hold.
Then as a partner they chose for themselves,
A breath taking dance will unfold.

The tango, a passionate dance,
With rhythm the dancers entwine.
Their wonderful movements excite me,
As the music and beat they define.

And so begins the sweet song of ballet,
As the flickering flames now dance.
On their toes they pirouette,
The audience is perfectly entranced.

After hours of dancing their energy dwindles,
And the dance floor of logs turns to ash.
Their costumes turn blue, as the heat fades away,
Then finally the dance floor will crash.

What is left behind, are some smoldering logs,
As the beautiful dancers have retired.
Disappeared in the night, gone is their light,
And the fiery dance of flames has expired.

Floria aka strbbux

[This message has been edited by strbbux (01-02-2002 08:52 PM).]

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