As the sun rise glows golden, And stars have surrendered to defeat, Saphire skies go into hiding, Dark sky and stars are obsolete. As warmth of daylight begins, Sleep now falls on darkened skies, Awakening me to a new tomorrow, As I open up my eyes.
I get a good feeling from this. It has fresh and nice imagery. I particularly liked the line, "Saphire skies go into hiding." I might consider working on the meter just a little. It seems to me to be begging for a little more consistency although I have to say that it doesn't really bother me as it is.
Thanks pete, I love your input and will see what I could do..Hmmm what is meter? LOL just kidding, I am a fairly new poet, and from time to time I have to look up a word that someone throws at me like Iambic..that really floored me,,,thanks for the input. floria