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lizzyluv
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since 12-27-2001
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nh, usa. we suck.


0 posted 12-29-2001 09:50 PM       View Profile for lizzyluv   Email lizzyluv   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lizzyluv

Go on, turn your girl into
ground. Watch the dirt sift.
I'll fall between your
fingers like rain. I
tried to love you.
ever trying. Still trying.
Always trying.
But does the dirt ever make it?
Don't sneer, dear; it fouls your
complection. [Edited by moderator]
If i had your heart,
no? it'd
be gross, All the blood
you'd give me squirting
between my hands like sand.
I'd hold it in my arms.
and then store it in my
coffin-death box. Don't cry.
Take your shower and brush
those teeth. Don't mind my
reflecting in the mirror. That'll
go away. Cuz I'm under
your feet. You make it so
hard. Always shoving.
knocking pushing.
always twitching
poking forcing
always shrieking
growling breaking.
Can't you ever just let it
all be the way you want?


"everyone is broken by something they love and worship"- Francesca Lia Block
*lizzy*
© Copyright 2001 Liz MacKinnon - All Rights Reserved
Ousiders Cattermole
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1 posted 12-29-2001 10:25 PM       View Profile for Ousiders Cattermole   Email Ousiders Cattermole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ousiders Cattermole

hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm, let me think, you know call me crazy but this reminds me of a backstreet boy song, not one of their hit songs, but I dare say a potential hit.
lizzyluv
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2 posted 12-29-2001 10:52 PM       View Profile for lizzyluv   Email lizzyluv   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lizzyluv

haha, i could kick you for that one. how would the overlap be conveyed, different "vocalists"? where's the chorus?
"If i had your heart,
         no?        it'd
be gross,   All the blood
you'd give me squirting
between my hands like sand.
I'd hold it in my arms.
and then store it in my
coffin-death box."
i'm not sure how this would go over to all the little pre-pubescent girls out there sobbing "joey" into their posters and wishing for just one kiss. hmm? kudos for making a response, however, you may have a cookie.

"everyone is broken by something they love and worship"- Francesca Lia Block
*lizzy*

lizzyluv
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3 posted 12-29-2001 10:53 PM       View Profile for lizzyluv   Email lizzyluv   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lizzyluv

oh, and you're crazy.

"everyone is broken by something they love and worship"- Francesca Lia Block
*lizzy*

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4 posted 12-30-2001 01:51 AM       View Profile for Ousiders Cattermole   Email Ousiders Cattermole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ousiders Cattermole

First off any backstreet boy fan knows that Joey is from nsync, not the backstreet boys.
Lady what kind of a fan are you? You know that your fan club membership is coming up for renewal in January, I don't think they would look too kindly on this.
lizzyluv
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5 posted 01-01-2002 05:32 PM       View Profile for lizzyluv   Email lizzyluv   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lizzyluv

oh damn, looks like i'm in huge trouble. maybe i'll juast go join the nsync fanclub! hah! so there! hehe, i'm such a bad fan, god, i can't even remember their names. *sobs* i'm gonna throw myself f/a bridge, now. will you plead my case for me?

"everyone is broken by something they love and worship"- Francesca Lia Block
*lizzy*

lizzyluv
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6 posted 01-01-2002 05:33 PM       View Profile for lizzyluv   Email lizzyluv   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lizzyluv

oh, and whoever edited this, can you ask me first, next time? cuz that was definately not oaky w/me.

"everyone is broken by something they love and worship"- Francesca Lia Block
*lizzy*

punksmurf
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7 posted 01-01-2002 06:29 PM       View Profile for punksmurf   Email punksmurf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for punksmurf

ummmmmmmmmmmmmmm, yeah, so this poem was perfectly fie til you people [edited by moderator] around withit, and, as liz does know, at least, i think there is  a joey in each? as i was saying, you gave me an,........................uuuummmmm.......................interesting visual there with the blood and the sand and the screamin pre-pubes. hi Lester!!!!
~Me

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (01-01-2002 08:32 PM).]

Not A Poet
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8 posted 01-01-2002 10:37 PM       View Profile for Not A Poet   Email Not A Poet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Not A Poet's Home Page   View IP for Not A Poet

Lizzy, there are rules here. This site is not your personal property. If you refuse to follow those rules, your abuses will be edited for you. If you continue to abuse those rules then more the corrective steps may become more severe than simple editing by moderator.

Think about it.

And while I don't personally mind your constant whining and complaining because I can simply ignore it, some other forum members may not be so tolerant.

Pete

Never express yourself more clearly than you can think - Niels Bohr

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9 posted 01-01-2002 10:52 PM       View Profile for Ousiders Cattermole   Email Ousiders Cattermole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ousiders Cattermole

I don't mind her 'constant whining and complaining', she might not be a lady, but 'not a poet' your probably not a gentlemen.

'censorship is but a prelude to the vice of misery'
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