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rich-pa
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since 02-07-2000
Posts 325
New Orleans, Louisiana


0 posted 12-24-2001 11:23 PM       View Profile for rich-pa   Email rich-pa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for rich-pa


waking up?
-dang it my head hurts
a tumbleweed of sheets
and flesh...
and flesh!?-
next to me on me around me
that Divine Being
seductively smoking cigarettes?
-wait-what-who are you?
Aphrodite? Shiva?
last night i called you God?
last night...oh...
-that great abyss of thought
-glimpses flashes-
drunken poets crying for Almighty God
and then nothing-
-now here next to you

We went to Heaven
Nirvana-Dharma
Abracadabra-
-oh-by the way
hi my name is-
does it matter? you know
more than my mother
You know more than all-

-get up get out
out of the bed
no more heaven for me-not today
-thank you much it was fun-
yeah-sure
i'll call ya next weekend
you bring truth
i'll bring brandy and cigars
and we can argue then look for
Heaven- ?
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Tony Di Bart
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since 01-26-2000
Posts 163
Toronto, Canada


1 posted 12-25-2001 07:37 PM       View Profile for Tony Di Bart   Email Tony Di Bart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tony Di Bart

Well Mr. Pa or should I call you rich.  

A great peice of poetry.  Some of the punctuations throw me off at first but man was that a great peice of work. I had to have a cigarette after I read the poem.  

Beautiful, simple and evocative.  I can relate to the searching for god and sprituality in the wonderful one night stand.  Then it brings up immense lonliness and the shallowness of the medium of our meditations once it reveals it's self.

Thanks for postings
hush
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since 05-27-2001
Posts 1693
Ohio, USA


2 posted 12-26-2001 11:52 AM       View Profile for hush   Email hush   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hush

"Oh god... Oh GOD!"

Lol, I've always laughed at the idea that a skillful movement of the tongue (or whatever, heh heh) can give you diety status, even if it's only in bed. This is really great, I love it. I wouldn't change a thing.

"I'm thinking about leaving tomorrow
I'm thinking about being on my own
I think I been wasting my time
I'm thinking about getting out"

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