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Mommy, why?
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shoffswife Junior Member
since 2001-12-23
Posts 38KY, US |
I posted this on the open poetry forum, but didn't know about this one. Sorry for the inconvenience. I wrote this poem after having a miscarriage in 1998. Mommy, why'd you get rid of me? You were going to be the first person for me to see. Would I have your smile or maybe your eyes? Oh! It wouldv'e been such a surprise. I never got to see you or my dad. I couldn't have been that bad. Was I going to be a girl or a boy? Either way, I wouldv'e brought you joy. I wouldv'e made you laugh, smile and even cry But I'm gone now, mommy, why? Why'd you let me go? What I look like, you'll never know. Do you ever think about me? Your baby, the one you'll never get to see. Promise me you'll always remember me. Promise me you'll always love me. Mommy, why couldn't I have stayed? If you didn't want me, why was I made? |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This is such a sensitive poem. I would never critique it. I comes from the heart. Poems like this should be left just as written. It is beautiful and so sad. My best to you. strbbux  |
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Englishpoet Member
since 2001-12-18
Posts 54Birmingham, England |
Dear shoffswife This is a poem from the heart of a mother and should stay as it is. I do not know the background of your miscarriage so it's difficult to comment but I would say to you that it's not your fault. As a professor of reproductive physiopathology, I can tell you that some 30% of all pregnancies are lost before they are clinically detected. It's a body's response to ensure that only the strongest and healthiest embryos develop into a baby. I hope you and your husband will fulfil your dreams. Wishing you happiness in the New Year. The poem is lovely and it kept my attention. I wanted to read it again and again. Best wishes asif ahmed |
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shoffswife Junior Member
since 2001-12-23
Posts 38KY, US |
thank you. [This message has been edited by shoffswife (12-23-2001 04:26 PM).] |
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