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hmmm...transpoetics...is that a word?
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
it's amazing how the pen moves spirit infused super-charged mostly when the body stumbles and staggers -brain pain ATP exhausted- but when the body's alive- jive jam jump the pen is another rock a lump on the earth and why? Does energy and happiness make the spirit quiet push the spirit back into nothingness torture the spirit in dark recesses andless torture for endless secrets? No! the spirit has not time to stop and write and transubstantiate the energy of alive instead it screams out mingling with that beautiful endless saving force adding to the joyous shouts of those lucky enough to enjoy the world those for whom a leaf fo grass holds more wonder and beauty than all of man's spiritually reversing advancements and materially focused living -the spirit is one with the transcendent the greatest poem in itself liquid and moving and forever intuned with the world and power to which it belongs forever our song of triumph -Bliss- -but when the body is down it seems the spirit settles situated sedatively in these concete wastes of ink that forever fail to capture the song epic ballad sonnet free verse of me and you- "freedom is just another word for nothing left to lose..." -janis joplin |
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hush Senior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 1653Ohio, USA |
Very beatnik. Check this over for typos, I saw a few- "andless" and "fo" stuck out. Other than that, I like this... great beginning and ending, I seem to get lost a bit in the middle, but I'm also exhausted. I'll come back when I'm not tired and tell you if I'm still having the trouble. "we are all citizens of the womb before we subdivide |
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