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hmmm...transpoetics...is that a word?

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rich-pa
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since 02-07-2000
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New Orleans, Louisiana


0 posted 12-20-2001 09:10 PM       View Profile for rich-pa   Email rich-pa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for rich-pa


it's amazing how the pen moves
spirit infused super-charged
mostly when the body stumbles and staggers
-brain pain ATP exhausted-
but when the body's alive-
jive jam jump
the pen is another rock
a lump on the earth
and why?
Does energy and happiness
make the spirit quiet
push the spirit back into nothingness
torture the spirit in dark recesses
andless torture for endless secrets?
No!
the spirit has not time
to stop and write
and transubstantiate the energy of alive
instead it screams out
mingling with that
beautiful endless saving force
adding to the joyous shouts
of those lucky enough to enjoy the world
those for whom a leaf fo grass
holds more wonder and beauty
than all of man's
spiritually reversing advancements
and materially focused living
-the spirit is one with the transcendent
the greatest poem in itself
liquid and moving and forever intuned
with the world and power
to which it belongs
forever our song of triumph
-Bliss-
-but when the body is down
it seems the spirit settles
situated sedatively
in these concete wastes of ink
that forever fail to capture
the song epic ballad sonnet free verse
of me and you-

"freedom is just another word for nothing left to lose..."  -janis joplin

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hush
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since 05-27-2001
Posts 1693
Ohio, USA


1 posted 12-20-2001 11:35 PM       View Profile for hush   Email hush   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hush

Very beatnik.

Check this over for typos, I saw a few- "andless" and "fo" stuck out.

Other than that, I like this... great beginning and ending, I seem to get lost a bit in the middle, but I'm also exhausted. I'll come back when I'm not tired and tell you if I'm still having the trouble.

"we are all citizens of the womb before we subdivide
into shades and sexes- this side, that side" -Ani DiFranco

 
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