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Critical Analysis #1

i feel sick

punksmurf
Junior Member

since 2002-01-01

Posts 37
new hampshire, U.S.

0 posted 2002-01-15 06:43 PM

this is the most pointless poem i've ever written, and i'm only posting it for kicks and giggles

it's all your fault
but nothing could ever be
blamed on your sadness
would you like those tears
now
or
Later?
misery today
but you're not listening
you never did
everything is gone today
but nothing was ever, really
There
so now i'm sick

I'm Dying

~Me
yes the title has absoloutly nothing to do w/the poem, so don't comment on that

punksmurf
Junior Member

since 2002-01-01

Posts 37
new hampshire, U.S.

1 posted 2002-01-20 02:44 PM

no wonder you people haven't responded, this poem sucks
~Me

Opeth
Senior Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

2 posted 2002-01-22 09:53 AM

Then why did you post it in here?

punksmurf
Junior Member

since 2002-01-01

Posts 37
new hampshire, U.S.

3 posted 2002-01-22 05:45 PM

because i didn't realize it at the time, stupid!
if you're going to respond, make it a worthwile response, christ!
~Me

Chrissy
Member

since 2002-01-24

Posts 81
Idaho, no I am not a farmer!

4 posted 2002-01-24 04:35 AM

I dont think this poem sucks, i actually think the only reason people write poetry, because what they write is in their heart...Its like a journal, and for you to sahre your feelings with so many people is a special thing in itsself. Thanks for the insight.

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