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SunShine913
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Baby Toes
You told me once
that I had adorable little
baby toes.
And you wanted to name them
and you wished I would paint them radical colors
and wear rings around them
and draw attention to them.
I never understood that.

You used to say
that I had a great body
and I should wear flashy clothes
so other people would appreciate it.

And once you said
I had beautiful blue eyes
and I should wear mascara
and eyeliner
and eyeshadow.

I never understood that.

One day I painted my baby toes bright pink
and put little silver rings around them.
I wore new sandals so you could see.
And I wore a little mascara.
But you didn't notice it,
because you weren't looking in my eyes
when you told me it was over.

            *!~!* Andrea *!~!*    

© Copyright 2001 Andrea L. Figueroa - All Rights Reserved
Songbird
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1 posted 11-24-2001 11:58 AM       View Profile for Songbird   Email Songbird   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Songbird's Home Page   View IP for Songbird

I don't think there is anything to tear apart in this poem.. I really think you did a great job with it in my opinion. It was a very enjoyable read the message to me that you were already beautiful, and whoever the guy was he couldn't appreciate real beauty. Good riddens to him. Hope to see more of your poetry.
warmhrt
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I, too, think the poem was well done. Nice build up to the final stanza, which held image and emotion well. Good job.

Kris

"It is wisdom to know others;
It is enlightenment to know one's self" - Lao Tzu

strbbux
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This was awesome,, a great write and a great read.. I loved it. strbbux
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