I find this facinating. Having read it over three times slowly to savor it all. And that is what must be done with this type of poem. It is heartfelt and deep.. the hope-scotch didnt so much get in my way,, but I am thinking on another line,, maybe saying something like,
I need that chalk to finish a picture
that you started and left undone.
This might bring you back inside me,
which I most welcome, as I miss you,
My child within..
just some thoughts here for you to work on, don't put yourself down so much. These are good thoughts and inner feelings that you bring out.
And when you post, don't first say, " needs a lot of work" that is negative, you will get good feedback from some poets here and will continue to write and learn. hope this helps you. I understand this poem so much. I hope to see you re write it and post it so I could see what you have done with it. strbbux