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The Glass Fool |
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Ousiders Cattermole Junior Member
since 2001-11-02
Posts 27 |
Arisen for rouges of hue Amid the sinking of the sands Waning The Glass Fool As wrath {reigned fourth the damned} Affliction amid a-wane For all the willows-to-wander Rapt amid a-billow Wrought fourth {for this to ponder} Queerest dreams - Queerest screams Quaintest thoughts of a Query dream. |
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Kevin Taylor Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 185near Vancouver, BC, Canada |
What does it mean? Kevin |
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silent whispers Junior Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 40Alaska |
I agree with Kevin, I don't get this. The meaning got lost somewhere. You might also want to check the reading of the two stanzas, they don't match. The first one is great, but the second is almost dogeral in its sing-songiness. |
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Marq Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 222 |
This does seem to be very inside -- as in the meaning is known only to the author but I like the way this reads out loud and the way you use sound also the archaic nature of the writing. I notice you spell 'fourth' the same way both times. Another trick or inside meaning? |
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Jericha Satchel Junior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 11 |
It's not archaic. How do you want to get crit on this? Message? Dreck. Someone will defend it for you though. Someone else asked what it meant a little higher up. Well? Don't you know? Call me a drudge but I don't think that a form of written Rorschach qualifies as poetry. |
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lizzyluv Junior Member
since 2001-12-27
Posts 46nh, usa. we suck. |
wow, that was trippy-fun. do i smell the backstreet boys howling for the rights to it? i think i do. your word play is quirky and fun, and just schizophrenic enough for my tastes. (i looked it up). i like the concept and your expression warrents applause. *sounds of applause swell in background*. i was amused. let's see some more. "everyone is broken by something they love and worship"- Francesca Lia Block |
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lizzyluv Junior Member
since 2001-12-27
Posts 46nh, usa. we suck. |
wow, that was trippy-fun. do i smell the backstreet boys howling for the rights to it? i think i do. your word play is quirky and fun, and just schizophrenic enough for my tastes. (i looked it up). i like the concept and your expression warrents applause. *sounds of applause swell in background*. i was amused. let's see some more. "everyone is broken by something they love and worship"- Francesca Lia Block |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
call me loony but i do think written rorschach counts as poetry...it's all a dream anyways, hence the last lines, i think the meaning is in it's not meaning and the way dreams work...but i read too much Lacan, so that's my excuse... "freedom is just another word for nothing left to lose..." -janis joplin |
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lizzyluv Junior Member
since 2001-12-27
Posts 46nh, usa. we suck. |
i agree w/rich-pa, but substitute "cummings" for lacan.  "everyone is broken by something they love and worship"- Francesca Lia Block |
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punksmurf Junior Member
since 2002-01-01
Posts 37new hampshire, U.S. |
i enjoyed the fact that you didn't need to give anyone what they wanted, although the two stanzas don't quite fit, too bad, poor little brainless ones all got lost!, whoops, it was 'trippy-fun' and yes, joey IS a backstreet (don't ask how i know, liz does too, she listens to them) loving you induvidiality in that one, can't wait for more! ~Me |
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