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Critical Analysis #1

In the storm's eye

The Exile
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since 2001-07-14

Posts 52
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2001-07-14 09:38 PM

Near the lake we sat--
Late, in a Sunday afternoon.
Hearing Nature speaking words never uttered--
With her silent tone.

Perfect time of an almost perfect day--
With only a few--dark clouds in the sky.
Turning back--you looked at me and said--
“Oh well, I think they’re just passing by.”

Beneath the sky--
In my mind,
Surrounded is your laughter--
And the tender sound of the tide.

Another small boat cruising by--
Just another small boat--in the storm’s eye.

Sunshine

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1 posted 2001-07-15 08:51 AM

Welcome to Passions! I enjoyed this write, but am not in a mood to critique this morning, so I will say, glad to see you here! Hope you get to know your way around the Forums.

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ

The Exile
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since 2001-07-14

Posts 52
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2001-07-16 01:09 AM

Sunshine,

Thanks for sharing your time by reading the poem! I admit that i like literary criticism but it's always BETTER to see a nice warm sunshine first thing in the morning!

Cheers,

- Alex

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