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Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182
Netherlands

0 posted 2001-06-08 09:01 PM


This is the final result of all your good advices.
I'm satisfied with it, hope you do too.

Walking my dogs

It's that time of night
to walk my dogs
I don't want to
because
it's raining
but
four eyes
staring at me
two tailes swaying
ready to go
they don't care

I put on my coat
collar up
and step
outside
in a deep
poole
my feet all wet
I curse
the dogs
but they don't care

and off I go
down the path
they know
so well
they make no
sound but
they are close
snooping
around

I look up
at the sky
above
and hold
my breath
the rain has
stopped
and thousands
stars
are shining
and suddenly
I realize
why I choose
to live here
in the countryside

I call my dogs
and home
we go
I praise
them well
for reminding me
but they don't care

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace&naventryid=100

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