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Xeonox
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0 posted 2001-05-08 04:55 PM


Four lines to write,
Famous for those,
Shedding a thought,
Not just blowing it off.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

© Copyright 2001 Ronil B Tataria - All Rights Reserved
Kirk T Walker
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1 posted 2001-05-08 06:27 PM


A defense of your infamous brevity?  I don't really like the image of poetry as "shedding a thought" because of the negative and reptilian implications...No, I changed my mind.  I think that the more I think about the biological process of shedding (specifically as it applies to snakes) that I do like the image because it poetry is leaving a peice of yourself (a replica of sorts) behind and the poet grows and improves during the process.  But "blowing it off" still bothers me a little.  Perhaps if the image was more parallel to the image of shedding it would seem better. I like the idea here.

Disclaimer: The preceding statement is just my opinion.


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Thanks kirk. You always make my day with your comments.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

[This message has been edited by Xeonox (edited 05-09-2001).]

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