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williamthepoet Junior Member
since 2001-04-20
Posts 10 |
i found heaven in her eyes and lived there everything i felt was through her heart the sun shined melting the snowy fields the flowers grew amber romance in the air everything just for us i had to return to earth for a moment but before i left sliding my hand along hers we sealed our promise with a kiss we were hours away but our hearts were together the sky sometimes an ominous gray but the sweet winds blew regardless the winds suddenly soured lightning crashed as our heart ripped down in two and the earth swallowed me whole for a year i clawed my way back the snow has returned everything seems reverted but i can still smile at the memories memories of a different world: there is now dirt under my nails, and the taste of it in my mouth will never go away but the remembrances are worth it. |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
*hugs* love u william im addin this to my library tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Marq Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 222 |
I like the power and originality of the last stanza. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked the thought that was in the poem and the way u wrote this.. keep writing   ...?death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins |
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