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chitri
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since 2001-02-02
Posts 2


0 posted 2001-02-04 09:14 PM


Every smile,
every look,
every word,
makes me think day and night of an illusion
which will not be heard
which will not be seen
which will only be imagined.
I think about a dream
that will never be reality
and I hope it will one day be true
but know it won´t.
I´m confused
and I live surrounded by a thick fog
of memories
which haunt me
and make me wonder
if its worth it.

© Copyright 2001 chitri - All Rights Reserved
Brad
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since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea
1 posted 2001-02-06 03:11 PM


This seems very similar to your first post. Don't suppose you'd let us know what it is you're looking for here?

My suggestion would be to make the situation clearer -- give us more information, description on the person, less on the emotion.

Just an opinion,
Brad

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