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sylphid
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since 2001-01-23
Posts 30


0 posted 2001-02-03 03:18 PM


        bare stage
(lets  stretch and imagine)


a tree
lilac
stars and an apple

“screw emotions in battle”
I will find me an oak tree to lean on
I will sink in the scents of scattered lilacs ,
And munch on Adam’s throat ..oh I mean apple..

In dismay I will swallow
In reaction I will digest
To my hearty burns…I’ll bring along my medications..’ignorance you bet ‘

ow
My heart…
is it I hear…in the silence..?
contracting to sense
How I wish ….
but a false beat it was…
For I dare any emotions
To stay
In perpetuity
and pass bygone defeats
mark its way in the flesh in suspense
… If you wonder
Its chivalry in genuine search I am really after
Not the stars….dear mere
And wait still, there is many coming chapters…




[This message has been edited by sylphid (edited 02-03-2001).]

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Brad
Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea
1 posted 2001-02-06 03:08 PM


This is interesting - I like some of the plays here (and I usually hate that stuff). The irony of the whole piece comes through loud and clear.

Perhaps, try to make it a little clearer - what exactly is happening?

I'm pretty sure I know though.

Just an opinion,
Brad

Not A Poet
Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA
2 posted 2001-02-06 04:47 PM


Either Brad is a whole lot smarter than I am or he has some inside information. I'm sorry but you completely lost me here.

Pete

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