Critical Analysis #1 |
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Hardkore Junior Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 33San DIego, California |
Passion fuels my love Passion becomes consumed by love Without my love I become passionless ------------------------------------- Glimpses of a future Whose chances are almost never Emotions never know nor shared Only left with the chance To fuel her passions towards others Tormented to watch in the corner Loving her may bring me to lose my heart For it can't handle the loneliness much longer Delisions of her felling the same Curses me to hope and dream I just want to wrap my arms around you And escape to a better place Lost in the love which is you Show me the way And together we will rise Above the rubble of the past |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
I need a little bit more to go on here. Can you describe the person more, describe yourself more? This has a potential to be interesting but I think you've gotten caught up in the feeling of the moment rather than the feeling of the poem. You also might think about expanding or reflecting on this moment; what is she doing? The movie 'High Fidelity' comes to mind as a possible model. Just an opinion, Brad |
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