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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN 
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Song is called "love is your color" you can see the inference I'm trying to make. so far.. all i have is.. (wonderful melody).. and ....... Love is your color it looks good on you I never noticed but it's true I thought I'd seen everything every shade of youuuuuuu but love is your color You don't need makeup to hide your smile cos i see brilliance that goes on for miles I thought I'd seen everything that was your style but love is your color (ok im not crazy about the "brilliance" line.. so help me out with some creative ways to say.. LOVE IS YOUR COLOR............(smile) please? Kay-lynn **A dream is a wish your heart makes :) |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Love is your color You wear it quite well It brings out all The lovely colors That suit you so well Love's cosmetics Are naturally suited To you They bring out your best Qualities Under every light that shines And under the right conditions In due time They will leave you with only Up turned smily wrinkle lines [This message has been edited by Songbird (edited 12-07-2000).] |
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Wesley the Blue Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 426Forest Lake, MN, USA |
ok, pretty cool poem/song. Ideas.. Ideas... Ideas.... Ill start with the "brilliance" line you mentioned. Try "cuz I see its shine" if you are looking for a regular syllabic count in the lines or "cuz I can see it shine" if not. also the next line "that goes on for miles" doesnt feel right to me. maybe change it to "going on for miles." As for other verses, well, I cant help you there, Im not very good at writing songs. Even in the darkest night, someone will be there holding a candle for you. |
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