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redshoes Junior Member
since 2000-05-22
Posts 12Massachusetts |
Irene Sepia warm skin tones Fur trimmed, lace brocade dress --and bare feet That dinner ring, sparkling Heavy diamonds, setting you chose --yourself (You are so Monroe-esque!) Ink stained fingertips, I try to hold my pen --like you I read what you wrote And vowed to take my shoes off Too-- (But I am so Un-Monroe...) I have no dinner ring, No prize of hearts thrown away, Broken-- No ink stains Forever present, like Irene, triumphant. |
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Elyse Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 414Apex (think raleigh) NC |
hi redshoes! i cant understand what you're trying to do with the hyphens. theyre a little distracting. i think just setting it off on a new line is fine. also, i dont get your Monroe refrence. but aside from that, a nice read  thanx for sharing it.luv Elyse Do I contradict myself? Very well then . . . . I contradict myself; I am large . . . . I contain multitudes. -Papa Walt |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
A mental picture is developing, but it's not quite complete. I see the audacity of Irene, but I don't know what motivates her. I sense that she is unique, but I want to know WHY? |
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