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Critical Analysis #1

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Rashka Fyre Blackheart
New Member

since 1999-10-17

Posts 7

0 posted 2000-05-29 02:59 PM

(Any imput will be appreciated!)
Hurt

I’m slipping away
You know it’s true
Slipping away
Away from you.

I beg and plead
I cry aloud
They beat and rape
It’s not allowed.

I’m slipping away
You know it’s true
Slipping away
Away from you.

My voice is hoarse
My body weak
They hurt and torture
They do not speak

I’m slipping away
You know it’s true
Slipping away
Away from you.

I am alone
My body broken
They left me shattered
They dealt my token

I’m slipping away
You know it’s true
Slipping away
Away from you.

I begged for mercy
I cried your name
They destroyed my body
Left me insane.

I’m slipping away
You know it’s true
Slipping away
Away from you.

Now you find me
A memory lost
This is life’s
Life’s greatest cost.

I slipped away
You know it's true
Slipped away
Away from you.

The lunatic, the lover, and the poet. Are of imagination all compact..

Romy
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1170
Plantation, Florida

1 posted 2000-05-30 09:30 PM

This is very sad...it sounds like it would make a good song!

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