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Snb4everm
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since 2000-05-15
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0 posted 2000-05-15 10:52 AM


This is a new poem.  I only have one other listed under "sad poems".  I am curious as to what anybody thinks about this peom.  Let me know


My Child - Where HAve You Gone?

My precious child, where have you gone?
Without you the days and nights are oh so long.
I long for your laughter like bells in my ear
The warm sweet touch that still seems near.

The gentle hugs and kisses that touched my life
The tender-filled moments of saying goodnight.
Where is the smile that lights up my day?
Leaving me to face a sky filled with gray

Days so long that time stand still
Feeling as though life is an upward  hill
How can I go on without you, my child?
With none of your hugs, so tender and mild?

I long for you with an ache in my heart
Wanting to search with no place to start
Upward I climb, ever searching for you
And then heavens gates come into my view

Great golden arches,  like beacons in the sky,
Now fill my sight as I begin to cry.
And then I see you, running so free,
Running rosy little rings around God’s warm knee.

Why, oh, Lord, have you taken my child?
The sweet smiling face that left me beguiled
Gone too soon, Lord, gone forever..
I thought we would always be together

My child, said God, she is not gone
She has come home to me, where she belongs
One day you too will be home
In Heaven’s gardens, together you shall roam.

Together again, together forever,
To run, to laugh, to play together.
For reasons you can not know or understand,
I have taken her back into my strong hands

This was my choice and my choice alone.
Don’t blame yourself , guilt is a stone
I too love this child that I chose just for you
And I realize the moments you had together were too few

So take a moment now to love her again,
Wrap your arms around her and smile again
Take these moments into your heart
Go back to your life and live out your part

Home is where the heart is, my child
All you have to do is wait a short while
Be patient, my child, one day you will see
We will all be together for eternity

I awoke right then with a smile on my face
I knew for sure I had been touched by God’s grace
My heart is still broken, still filled with pain
But I know for sure we’ll be together again




[This message has been edited by Snb4everm (edited 05-15-2000).]

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