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ghirgag
Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 11


0 posted 2000-04-28 12:58 PM


There is an old Italian legend…

“It was a sunny day
And there was something new
In the air.
Mother snake was giving birth
To her seventh son.
He was the oldest of the nest.
She was licking him
When, suddenly
The asp bit to the mother to death”.

Much later
Another son, man
Bit his mother, “Nature”, to death.

She gave him life
She nurtured and loved him.
But he, ungratefully like the asp
Poisoned air, water, and ground.

Whilst she was dying
She even looked at him with love.

Oh, poor man!
Don’t you realize that
You have bitten yourself?


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winterinblue
Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 32

1 posted 2000-04-29 03:52 AM


I really love this poem - please see my other note in #7 - but since I found this in here - only one thing struck me - the seventh baby born in the nest, would not be the oldest.

netswan
Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
2 posted 2000-04-30 04:50 AM


This is very good poem and leaves a lot
to ponder on.  I agree with the above.
And, it struck me, too --)
last one can't be the oldest.
I think I would put a comma after
but he, ungratefully, like the asp

But, that is what I think makes for
easier reading.

Otherwise. this poem gets my kudos --)

netswan

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