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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563
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veils of smoke rose from her painted lips as she spoke, disguising her words... mirrors manipulated to make them appear to be Truth, when in reality, those words were dealt, sleight of hand, from the bottom of the deck, as she gazed down her nose at me, through fashionable glasses perched low on the bridge. the illusion she presented, with such showmanship, so skillfully crafted, was just what I wanted to see, but in the end, her spellbinding wizardry was exposed...disclosed...unveiled, and I was left holding the white rabbit. Kristine < !signature--> the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare [This message has been edited by warmhrt (edited 04-14-2000).] |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Hi Kris, This must be Friday. There seems to be no activity today and I must be terrible slooow. I've read this one several times and I must confess the point goes right over my head  I do get a quite clear mental image but don't think it is what you were pushing. I see an old gypsy fortune teller facing you over her crystal ball feeding you a really good line of BS  As I said, the image is almost like a photo but I don't understand the point. . . . Oh wait, finally something is starting to gel even as I write, something related to gullibility or vanity or just selected realization. Don't know. May come back later (when head is clearer) and try again. Thanks for another mental/verbal portrait. I don't know how you keep doing that. Pete What terms shall I find sufficiently simple in their sublimity -- sufficiently sublime in their simplicity -- for the mere enunciation of my theme? Edgar Allan Poe |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Pete, In actuality, I wrote this after being interviewed for, and briefed on a job by a person in Human Resources, only to find out after accepting the job, and on the day of orientation, that most of what she said was untrue or exaggerated. Needless to say, I was a bit upset, and walked out. So, can you see how I'm portraying this woman? Me...well, I'm very trusting, but I wouldn't say gullible. I always hope that people are honest, but I am quite aware that a lot of them aren't. I am, though, a bit ticked at myself for not asking more questions. Sorry I didn't make this one a little clearer. I coul've added more details. Thanks for reading, Kris < !signature--> the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare [This message has been edited by warmhrt (edited 04-16-2000).] |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Yes, my dear, I do understand and ok, trusting is probably a better word. But upon further review, I think I like my interpretation more  No I don't think you need to add more details but maybe a little more color, for lack of a better word. Whether intended or not, you have really created some vivid imagery here. If you simply add a little more pizzaz (which you are certainly capable of) I think it becomes a very interesting poem. JMHO  Pete |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
I like Pete's interpretation. I don't think it really goes against what you want to say anyway. I'm not a big fan of the White Rabbit part; it makes me think of Alice (or Jefferson Airplane) rather than of magic tricks. Maybe something like you saw who the woman was sawed in half of something like that. Also, think about dropping "the illusion she presented, with such showmanship, so skillfully crafted," I think this is already clear from the images presented. But believe it or not, I enjoyed reading this one. Brad |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Brad (see, I'm being nice. I left out the "ley"), Why believe it or not? Do you usually dislike reading my work? I will take your suggestions under serious consideration. I agree with you about Pete's interpretation not going against the manner I intended it to be taken. I'm always aware that any work is open to the reader's interpretation, but Pete seemed to want to know the motivation behind the writing, so I told him. In the end, he preferred his own take on it, which is fine with me...whatever the reader would like it to mean, as long as they enjoy it. I'm glad you read, commented, and enjoyed. Thanks, Kris< !signature--> the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare [This message has been edited by warmhrt (edited 04-15-2000).] |
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Elyse Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 414Apex (think raleigh) NC |
hi! i thought your poem was really interesting, and had sort of a liquid flow to it. some of the images seem kinda confusing at first, like smoke coming from her lips, but you read the next line and it makes more sense. That works really well with a poem about illusion, i thought =) luv Elyse |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Unsurprisingly Kris I found this rather easy to interpret but I must say it added a lot of flesh to the bones of what must have been an extremely irritating and distressing experience. I especially liked the "veils of smoke" and, in contrast to Brad, I also rather enjoyed the "White Rabbit" image. Sure, it conjured up visions of Alice, but why not? My grandfather was forever saying to his wife (when she did something particularly scatty) that “she must live in Wonderland” ..... Well surely that was precisely the feeling that you got walking into that environment that day ..... there you were expecting the world to be one thing and it turned out to be something completely different ...... pure Alice in W ....... though in this instance it was Kris in W ..... hey maybe you could make something of this .. and portray “Ms Fashionable glasses” as the Queen ..............or something ..... Just an idea.......lol Philip |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Elyse, Welcome to CA! Thanks so much for reading and for your thoughtful comments. Sir Philip, Well, knock me over with a feather!  You've made an appearance on one of my threads... Let me catch my breath... I knew you would be able to interpret this one accurately...you just know me too well. I'll think about the "Alice" thing...not too sure about it, though. Here the rabbit was supposed to represent "nothing"...the illusion exposed...the magic that is not there. I'm sure you knew that already, but thought I'd clarify just in case.I sincerely do appreciate you taking the time to read and comment, Philip...I know you're very busy. Hope to see you soon. Kris the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Kris: At first reading I thought this might have been some college professor or high school teacher who enjoyed the psychological advantages of her position a little too much. I guess the "white rabbit" thing conjured images of Alice but when taken in context of the rest of your language (spellbinding wizardry ... illusion) it was easy enough for me to skirt past. The ending did leave me with a few questions, however, and I wasn't sure who really won this confrontation you described. Perhaps your walking out of the interview was the "pulling the rabbit out of the hat" trick that stole the spotlight from Ms. Human Resources. If I was to suggest you elaborate on anything, it would be on the meaning of you holding the white rabbit. Then again, maybe I wouldn't suggest it. With or without the white rabbit, nice work, Kris. Jim |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Jim, Hi Teach! I did have a college prof like that. In this situation, I took the job, went in for my first day, which was orientation, and after seven hours of review of hospital policy, safety issues, confidentiality, a tour, etc., I finally get to speak to someone in the area I'll be working in. It took but a few minutes to see that Ms. HR had embellished, twisted, and diguised the truth about the position. I went to speak to her, and walked out, telling her I did not want the job. So, I guess both of us were left with nothing. That is what I intended the rabbit to mean...nothing but an illusion. Thanks for reading, Jimteach, and for your comments. *bows, arms folded in front, and backs away* Grasshoppa the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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