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patchoulipumpkin
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since 2000-01-01
Posts 196
Bermuda

0 posted 2000-04-10 01:24 AM




Led Zeppelin is so good
I would have loved to see them live
Imagine
That

I don’t feel like we are seeing any Beatles
Zeppelins
Hendrix’s
Anymore

It was so fresh back then
It was new
No video to sell it
No advertising getting in the artist’s way
It was clean road

Maybe that’s why I secretly make fun of hippies
Cause they were naïve
They couldn’t see what was coming
The utopia
The dream unravelling

I don’t blame them
If I had the opportunity to be a hippie
I would take it, sure
Why not
Lose myself for a few years.
Maybe even pretend if I had to
Tell myself things to maintain my feeling of freedom

I don’t blame them at all
If they were ignorant
It was beautifully done
Innocently

A dove
With soft claws
Flying as long as possible
To avoid scratching the earth

Its silly now
Doves
The idea of them
All white and virginal
Breasts to the wind

I laugh now
Because it is silly
Hippies
I tell myself its funny
They were so naive

While secretly
I'm jealous
That my dove wasn't allowed
As long a flight


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warmhrt
Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563

1 posted 2000-04-10 01:43 AM


Hey Patch,

Haven't seen you in a while. I like this. It's different...fresh. However, I don't equate idealism (if that's what you're saying hippies were) with naivete. There have been idealists since... well, a long, long time. I've always been one...just depends on your outlook, perceptions, and standing up for what you believe in.

Kris

 the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing
A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare

Not A Poet
Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA
2 posted 2000-04-10 11:40 AM


Hi Patch,

Good to see you again. This was refreshing. I too remember the hippies, even had a few friends. Brought back a few pleasant memories of simpler times.

Thanks.



 Pete

What terms shall I find sufficiently simple in their sublimity --
sufficiently sublime in their simplicity --
for the mere enunciation of my theme?
Edgar Allan Poe



bboog
Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303
Valencia, California
3 posted 2000-04-10 09:23 PM


Patch,
   Like wow, man, groovy. I've got "Freebird" cranked on the radio right now and I'm trippin. Cool poem.
bboog

hippie_teen
Junior Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 18
Escondido, CA, USA
4 posted 2000-05-19 06:07 PM


Naive, are we?  Hippies that is.  A wonderful poem, and being the hippie that I am, I appreciate this work a great deal.
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