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SuZi New Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 8Louisville, KY |
Tonight, I sit here, Tears streaming down my face, You have wretched my heart from me. I trusted you. I gave you everything. You took and took and left me a shell. Where is the justice? Where is the truth? I asked only to be loved As I have loved you, Selfless and unconditional. Yet you cannot You hold back, you find fault, You do not return my love. Tonight, I sit here, Heart less. [This message has been edited by SuZi (edited 04-03-2000).] |
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Sparks Junior Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 11Sandy Lake, Pa |
wow. very powerful. I've felt that way more than once myself. |
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tom Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 90s/w penna u.s.a. |
SuZi Very powerful,heart felt poem. Only thing I would change,third line second stanza,take out one "took",I feel only one is needed to say what you need to. More than that gives me the feeling of desperation,not the feeling of "heart less" (hopelessness)I think you were looking for. Just my opinion. Good read tom love is what lovers do when your loving me and i'm loving you. me |
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