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haze
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0 posted 2000-03-20 04:03 AM


Eccentric AH
Electric AH
Valenci AH
but Sweet AH

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haze
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1 posted 2000-03-20 04:07 AM


Transmigration Of The Translation
Before JBouder Asks The Nation

eccentrica=eccentric stuff
electrica=electric stuff
valencia=juicy stuff
but sweeter=but sweeter stuff

enough stuff? Damn=I hope so

What/Who's Eccentrica?
Click it and find out

[This message has been edited by haze (edited 03-20-2000).]

Brad
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2 posted 2000-03-20 11:00 AM


Well, we all have our favorites (some of you already know who my other favorite is). If you don't have a favorite yet, find one!!! Haze, don't suppose you can hang out a bit?
By the way, I hated this one (I checked the link -- you know!)
Brad

haze
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3 posted 2000-03-20 11:58 AM


Brad Brad Brad
I would really be concerned if you liked this (it would give a whole new layer of meaning to the movie "Body Snatchers")So-I'm glad you hated it.

TA-nice to see ya'



Local Rebel
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4 posted 2000-03-20 11:58 AM


What an electrically eccentric slice of tangerine tango ms. Haze... the simplicity of this funderful opus is erotically complex and layered in honey...

nice...  

haze
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5 posted 2000-03-20 03:57 PM




I knew you'd get it-thanks LR!

haze
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6 posted 2000-03-20 03:58 PM


  

not once but twice-what is this cgi script coming to?

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bboog
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7 posted 2000-03-20 08:14 PM


H~
I live in Valencia. (I guess that's what makes me so sweet)
  I liked the knife in the pear.
I noticed another Pennsylvania connection though. What is this, Passions in Pennsylvania Poetry?
bboog

jbouder
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8 posted 2000-03-21 01:09 PM


Haze:

Well, I suppose that I'm with Brad on this one.  I, personally, did not like this as much other poems you've written.  One question:

"Transmigration Of The Translation
Before JBouder Asks The Nation"

What is this all about?  HMMMPHHHH!!!  Taking a shot at my analytic side, huh?  

Welcome back, Haze.

Jim

P.S.  You left out "Metalic AH".

haze
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9 posted 2000-03-21 02:25 PM


Hey Jim-
It was the boldest brashest way to come back
Sometimes Ya' Just Gotta'...ya' know

ROFL-Yep
"Transmigration Of The Translation
Before JBouder Asks The Nation"
just a thinly disguised "hello" to the anal-ytical side of your brain...

Regarding Metallic AH
I have also been informed I usurped
Erotic AH among the many other Ah's that escaped my mutilation...actually-I had just penned the first two prose pieces (in 20 years) and needed to unwind the language-take my liberties and abuse my license...I think I did it well...ROFL

so

Eccentric AH Electric AH
Erotic AH of Valenci AH
like Metallic AH
but so much
Sweet AH


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jbouder
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10 posted 2000-03-21 03:02 PM


Imagine what the world would be like with out the "anal-ytical" types.    I like the second version better, btw.  Nice to have you back.

Jim

haze
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11 posted 2000-03-21 03:31 PM




JB-without the analytical, I suppose I would remain untaxed and begin to believe I was living in Monaco

*ooo* now there is a thought! BRB
(maybe)

Local Rebel
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12 posted 2000-03-21 03:42 PM


ROFL@haze... Intoxic AH!
haze
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13 posted 2000-03-21 04:10 PM


Intoxic Ah is bleeding
Bett AH when you're
Eccentric AH Electric AH
toying with Erotic AH
on the streets of Valenci AH
and glittering in Metallic AH
but AH so much Hot AH
and by fah Sweet AH
lost in bed with your lov AH
head spinning intoxic AH


Local Rebel
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14 posted 2000-03-21 04:55 PM


Emphatic Ah
Delectic Ah... you AH gurl...  

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